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Chasing
2009-12-03 . chapter 6
OMG i love your Kabuto! Update soon;)
katie
2009-11-01 . chapter 6
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE THIS STORY! It's so cute and I've also read the snippet and I loved it to bits as well!
Mariagoner
2009-09-27 . chapter 6
Ah, you updated this story! And oh jeeze... I'm not usually one for mushy Sasuke (I really enjoy when he's being bad-** AND getting the girl!) but... my god, he's so CUTE here. And tragic! And love-lorn! And unable to express it!

I have to think that it's probably a good thing that he realizes he can't just have Hinata on a silver platter-- and of course, I'm happy she had the nerves required to admit it!-- because now he can WORK for her. And now he can really realize her value, and the fact that she's something he has to really treasure before they can come together.

Oh Hinata. Oh Sasuke! I am really looking forward to seeing how it is that you're going to help these two into each other's arms. Even when they're causing each other pain, they're so damn... bizarrely right for one another, balancing each other out. Love it as always and I can't wait to see you continue!
theXXapple
2009-09-06 . chapter 6
cute story. :X
OCQueen
2009-09-06 . chapter 6
Yaysies! Me likee the story :)
GioCentric
2009-08-28 . chapter 6
OMFG, a cliffhanger? Really? Damn it. Come on, update. It's been over a month. This story is so interesting. I felt that this chapter made Hinata really realistic. Breaking up with someone that loves you will make you feel guilty and having people talk about it is even worse.
sinemoras09
2009-08-22 . chapter 6
Okay, I'm pretty sure I've done stalking your FFN account. Dude, this was fantastic! Seriously! You have some wicked good talent there, I love your style! And you have an awesome sense of humor! LOL! This story is gold, like everything else you've written, and you really made my Saturday night! Thank you for sharing! :D
Apple Of The Sand
2009-08-21 . chapter 6
Wow. She broke up with him. : o Ha, that’s kinda funny. Bet he never expected that! :D But I do want to see them get back together eventually. I suppose it will be strange when he forgets everything and then everyone in the school is talking about a past relationship that he didn’t know he had! XD Ha!

"Days In Love" looks like a pretty fun read!
lovepeacebre
2009-08-19 . chapter 6
This story is quite amusing. I'll be looking forward to your next update.

Also your 'snippet' as you call it, wan good as well. I think, in my opinion, you should post it.
ww
2009-08-18 . chapter 6
I like how you wrote Sakura in this chapter (and Kabuto in the chapters so far. So devious). It's nice to see the non-main characters in stories get treated like people, and not like 1D caricatures.

And poor Sasuke! He certainly has had a lousy day. I feel like this chapter has been structured as a turning point (or one of them), perhaps as the lowest? If so, hopefully things will go up for the two of them.
21me21
2009-08-12 . chapter 6
oh please post up dat story it sounds god! love this chapter keep up da good work! Ciao!
Love Leads To Broken Hearts
2009-07-23 . chapter 1
I like it
Duel Soul
2009-07-18 . chapter 6
Mwahaha, had more fun reading this. Heehee, I like seeing Hinata paired up with anyone, she's so cute =^-^= Ohohoh, I love the dynamics in this story too. And best of all, Sasuke fangirls aren't clique ** like they are in most stories, Yay! It always makes me feel annoyed when writers push Ino and Sakura into those roles. Like to see stories from different points of view *nodda nodda*

*glomps* Thank you very much for satisfying the inner fangirl once more. Also the snippet at the end of this chapter made me giggle with delight- giggle for pete sakes I rarely ever giggle. Ahaha, my fangirl side's had it's fun today so time for bed (liturally- so very tired, so if there are lots of random spelling mistakes I apoligise) Thanks again 83
Adelaide 'Adell' Peirce
2009-07-18 . chapter 6
Poor Sassy and Hina. I liked the idea of SuiHina BTW
Stitchpuppy01
2009-07-15 . chapter 6
Haha, that's absolutely hilarious how all the girls think Sasuke is going to start flipping his lid and kill them.

And again, nice ending.

I feel bad for Hinata. She's always conflicted, berating herself, and never happy.

The introduction of Naruto's character was nice, but it seemed as if that one little encounter with Hinata at the restaurant dismissed her feelings for him. he kind of disappeared after a while...

Ah, but you have a great vocabulary and you use words well.

I wonder what will happen when the effects of the potion end. Will Sasuke's feelings just end or will his memories go too?
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