Outstanding...I especially liked this line " You couldn't express your own fears, your own desires in the life that had become a cage. (the Dark Lord had the key)"
And the ending-simply amazing...
-Alli

That was so good. I like how you captured the mundane in Regulus's life and how it was slowly destroying him from the inside out. Nice job!

This was beautiful. Regulus is definitely a fascinating character.

I loved these:

When you woke up that morning you couldn’t tell if the sky was blue or grey, the clouds where blue and the sky was grey.

(Sirius has grey eyes)


Walking down dark corridors you listened at keyholes, your ear pressed against the dark wood, gaining glimpses of the lives of others.


Sometimes you felt like a puppet, a wooden doll hung on broken woolen strings, its face painted a different shade than what it really was. Its red lips pouting, its blue eyes imploring.

It was not you.


Wonderful job!
- Gaby

I *love* this Fray!

The puppet analogy in particular, and the bracketed statements too, they were fantastic.

"In between dreaming you followed everyone else, their curses falling from your tongue, their anger spreading through your veins."
--I adore this, it's such a thought-provoking, contemplative sentence.

Overall, very interesting/amazing/*insert positive comment of choice*.

aw, lovely

*is overwhelmed*

It’s short, but from those few little lines, I learnt so much about Regulus, who he is, what he wants in life. Wow. It’s almost as though he is looking at himself from the outside, seeing the poor, lonely man others see him as, and he’s pondering that. Just. WOW.

I am amazed, and so totally favouriting this.
-Cuba

-tear-
Well-written.
Regulus later redeems himself! :)
but poor poor him :(

I love: “You try to eat the porridge that Kreacher has put too much brown sugar in, but it turns to ash on your tongue, a dark grey spreading over your mouth, catching on your insides,” and “In between dreaming you followed everyone else, their curses falling from your tongue, their anger spreading through your veins.”

Other notes:
“the clouds where blue and the sky was grey,” should be “he clouds were blue and the sky was grey.”

Why was “Everything you thought you had, has gone from worse to bad” in italics?

*jaw drops*

*drops further in utterly lack of speech*

*catches flies*

This was just...Regulus. "your feet tapping out a tune of lies and deception"...just...i can actually see him staring at his own body, almost inspecting himself for the strings, and vaguely wondering if he could cut them.

and voldemort holding the key to his life was just such a wonderful turn of phrase and horrible distortion of the simple mechanism of a lock and key...that just underlined the feeling of a trapped animal that regulus must've felt.

So yes, you are officially my hero...just *rereads* this has definitely got to be one of your best.

*bows*

Paddy