great chapter! i'm going to read the next one

great start to the story i can't wait for the next chapter!

It's a sad world when fanfiction like this gets two reviews. This is really, really good- I have trouble finding anything I could justifiably complain about. I love the idea of an Earth Prime who isn't a strong leader, but also appears to have a house-sized ego and a permanent no-worries attitude, the foreshadowing of Serafina's son being a pioneer at Deneb and thinking of changing his name to some kind of bird (Raven, right?) and I like how you use surnames from well-known Talent characters for your OCs. I also adore Serafina's dialogue, it gives a real impression of her character, and the sense you give that there are some things everyone knows you just don't do (the double duty thing) but that are happening, and no-one's noticing. The internal terms -tremors, for example- were also good, and well-explained without resorting to a couple of sentences that sound like they're straight out of an author's note.

However. *apologetic cough* I did manage to find a couple of points that could maybe be changed if you happened to have the spare time to edit a little. The bigger one is the clairvoyant trainee at the end of the second chapter; I have absolutely no clue what happened to her, but I get the idea that it was really quite disastrous. This is frustrating. Unless leaving it hanging was deliberate, would you consider putting the interested out of their misery? Also, in the first chapter in a couple of places, has eaten your formatting where you've used italics. Not your fault -I've seen it elsewhere, and think it may be a general bug- but it does mean that a couple of words run together.

-May

I love your writing style and your characterisation is very good.
please keep writing.

You're definitely doing things right again!

Some of the sentences in the opening paragraphs feel overly long... for an introduction to a story, you might want to rephrase them to a more reader-friendly length.