I have not actually heard the song...(I will check it out.) but this is a nice little piece.

Though, it might help to break up the passages, seperate lines for the speech?

Over all...its lovely. :)

The story is short, but the content is splendid. Another magnificent piece.

Longer please. XD The longer the story usually the better it captivates the reader. I think both characters here were a little OOC, so work on that. Overall a nice little theme going on here. Oh and I have the star quote before in the movie, Evening. Loved that movie. :)

-DarkShine07

That was so heartbreaking! Nicely done! I like it, I could feel my heart ache as the words nicely painted her emotions. Good job!

* landis icelilly *