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| Mini-Chobi 2008-03-21 ch 1,  | abuse*giggle* that's cute XD |
| theupdaters 2008-03-19 ch 1, | abuselove it. absolutly ADORE it. YAY. hm... is there... possibly... *sigh* please ma'am, can i have some more? oh god. oh god oh god. my weirdness is showing!! oh im so ashamed! -jolie |
| truest-of-true-loves 2008-02-17 ch 1, | abuseaw that was cute. |
| Venus_Rising 2007-12-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseGreat story. Seems like tension surely points to a budding romance. Can't wait to see what you come up with next. |
| Chris 2007-11-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseHi there and kudo's on this fabulous story. The beginning totally caught my attention and kept me wanting more as I read. However at the end of my reading I came to an abrupt hault in your story. It seems that this story has the potential to be so much more than what you have put into it. You should be very proud of yourself. I see your a beginner writter and could use alot of help. Your wording was used well and your imagination seems to have a great deal of flame to it, except when it comes to the ending. To me it seems as though you were trying create a cliffhanger, however you failed in the attempt. Better luck next time with that. Truly Yours Chris Highfield |
| Gone-away4eva 2007-11-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good, but one question, how old are they both? |
| AvidReaderAlso 2007-11-04 ch 1, | abuseI do like your take on mature versions of the show's characters. You manage to keep them 'in character', yet entirely believable as young adults, and this story was no exception. Jane and Gunther's 'battle' gave me a lovely chuckle -- nicely written. :) I really enjoyed the playfulness of the moment. I could so picture Guther's expression when he realised his hair was full of mud (you can tell he's just a little vain about his appearance, eh?) and... poor Jane. Can you imagine the tangles? :S Nevertheless, it was a very good way to finally break the ice between two long-time rivals. And, you ended on just the right note -- an acceptance of friendship. Well done.:D |
| Vena 2007-11-02 ch 1, | abuseGunther/Jane fluff =3 this was really cute, and i really like your writing style. mud is fun :D |
| Miss Pookamonga 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseOh, it was so CUTE! I love the part when Jane noticed how Gunther was actually LAUGHING, not snickering, and she realized that she liked him laughing like that. Aww ^_^ And when he starts tracing his finger over her face *sigh* how adorable. LOVE IT! Luv, Miss Pookamonga ;-P |
| KrisEleven 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseHehehehehehe. Cookies. *munch* I don't care about anyone else. I love this. It makes me giggle. Great story, Lightning. Beautiful. When do I get the next one? XP KrisEleven~ PS. I'll lose all credibility as a Jane/Jester shipper if you keep telling them that I encourage you. |