Cute, in the refreshing way that few things are on this site, because everything is either Jane/Jester or Jane/Gunther. It feels to me like this is pre-fluff for Jane and Gunther, but, hey, pre-fluff is fine with me. It's the real thing I have trouble stomaching when it comes in extremely large portions.

Hopefully shortly after this, Jane and Gunther found a stream or something and got all the mud off of them. I'd hate for the castle to go on the alarm when they got back, thinking Jane and Gunther were attackers in disguise, or something. : )

aww, so cute!

i absolutely love it

Wow,
the ending was not at all what i had anticipated -
and I absolutly LOVED it!

At seeing the words "fluffly" alongside the pairing "Jane and Gunther," I was expecting some ridiculously sappy outcome in which the two knights inevitabley fall in love and, outrageously enogh, become lovers.
The summery itself, however, gave me hope.
:]

Er, Don't get me wrong, by the way; I love the idea of Jane and Gunther as a couple, but it really fusterates me (and this applies to every pairing of any kind) when the two individual characters - just by a certian happening of events, and without much confrontation - suddenly find themselves in a complete state of mad infatuation with one another.

This, though...
this was nothing of the sort.

The plot and wording of the story is very clever.

I love how you first established they're relationship to be "tense and uncomfortable" and like the "edge of something more meaningful." That being a wonderfuly accurate discription of perhaps the unavoidable and very gruesome result of Jane and Gunther's correlation with each other - for it is always implied that the two are are, enevitably, natural enemies.

Yet, there stands always the small chance that Gunther will, in fact, abandon his evil ways and live down his father's reputation.

You did perfectly well in addressing this matter and the attention and detail was flawless; Jane was perfectly portrayed.

I greatly enjoyed reading this little OneShot, it was exactly what i was looking for!

thanx.

*giggle*

that's cute XD

love it.

absolutly ADORE it.

YAY.

hm...
is there...
possibly...

*sigh* please ma'am, can i have some more?

oh god.
oh god oh god.

my weirdness is showing!!
oh im so ashamed!
-jolie

aw that was cute.

Great story. Seems like tension surely points to a budding romance. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.

Hi there and kudo's on this fabulous story. The beginning totally caught my attention and kept me wanting more as I read. However at the end of my reading I came to an abrupt hault in your story. It seems that this story has the potential to be so much more than what you have put into it. You should be very proud of yourself. I see your a beginner writter and could use alot of help. Your wording was used well and your imagination seems to have a great deal of flame to it, except when it comes to the ending. To me it seems as though you were trying create a cliffhanger, however you failed in the attempt. Better luck next time with that.
Truly Yours
Chris Highfield

This is really good, but one question, how old are they both?

I do like your take on mature versions of the show's characters. You manage to keep them 'in character', yet entirely believable as young adults, and this story was no exception.

Jane and Gunther's 'battle' gave me a lovely chuckle -- nicely written. :) I really enjoyed the playfulness of the moment. I could so picture Guther's expression when he realised his hair was full of mud (you can tell he's just a little vain about his appearance, eh?) and... poor Jane. Can you imagine the tangles? :S Nevertheless, it was a very good way to finally break the ice between two long-time rivals. And, you ended on just the right note -- an acceptance of friendship.

Well done.:D

Gunther/Jane fluff =3
this was really cute, and i really like your writing style.
mud is fun :D

Oh, it was so CUTE! I love the part when Jane noticed how Gunther was actually LAUGHING, not snickering, and she realized that she liked him laughing like that. Aww ^_^ And when he starts tracing his finger over her face *sigh* how adorable. LOVE IT!

Luv,
Miss Pookamonga ;-P

Hehehehehehe. Cookies. *munch*


I don't care about anyone else. I love this. It makes me giggle. Great story, Lightning. Beautiful. When do I get the next one? XP


KrisEleven~


PS. I'll lose all credibility as a Jane/Jester shipper if you keep telling them that I encourage you.