It is so bittersweet, I loved it.

They are the cutest couple and the taboo part just makes it more beautiful.

I do hope you continue it!

~Hugs & Kisses~

I noticed a huge improvement in your grammar. That is always a good sign. I like where this is going so far. I'll state my previous comment again: This has loads of potential.

Well you were right. English isn't your strong suit.

Anyway, I like the first chapter. I managed to look past the huge spelling and grammatical errors. When I did, I found some potential. I'll keep reading, just try and work on that English.

An improvement over your last chapter, your English is getting better. Though, your English is better then my German

I love this story! I do! :)

Kira loves his sister so much it makes me smile. You are sucha great and wonderful sister! thank you for the gift.

That was a good first try!

There were a couple of misspelled words - visit doesn't have an e, contract? Was that what you were looking for? If it is, it has no e at the end too. I got confused.. concentrate? I don't know what you were aiming for at "contracte" - but your spelling is better than most native English speakers/writers in this site!

The « and » should be changed to " too, it got a little confusing at first but then I got used to it.

Overall, that was very romantic! Great job!

This was very good for your first time writing in just English. I do hope you continue with this story, I would enjoy reading more chapters! :)

Today I know why I live… I live because I love her, I live to love her… I’m nothing without her …

I love her…»


I LOVED it. Oh, sister-my best friend, my love! i love it and you!

:hugs and kiss:

Oh, What a beautiful gift! Thank you-you are always so sweet with me and giving me more than I deserve! :)

I have been so busy that it was so nice to read a new kira and cagalli story ^^

This weekend i shall send my letter and gift! I promise. ^.^

If you want to continue, I will help you okay? Send me the story before you post to Fanfiction and I will edit and help you. I am so proud of you! writing in english directly is really amazing.

:hugs:

i love you sister, thank you

Hey!!
A new story?? cool, I loved the beginning a lot, some words where not seperated from each other, other then that it was good!!
I love a good KiraCagalli fic you know :3

I feel sorry for KIra...he can't hold her, or kiss her whithout thinking more of here :D

Good beginning, please continue this one :P

Kiss and Hugs,
Infinite sky