Good part: Wow, this is a really good take on the motives behind Cain murdering Abel. Many know of the physical killing, but do not realize there really was a cause and a reason why his mind told him to do so, though it was a very evil thing to do.

Could have been better: The only thing I can see that wasn't as good as the rest is you didn't mention the mark on Cain that told others not to kill him. But everything else was good. :)

I really like this! Good work

Very good, I iked it. The only thing wrong with it is that Eve wasn't a prophet ess so theres no way anyone would have known that would happen.

Hi!

I like your story very much. :-)

First because of your writing style (Yeah! Someone who has remembered that this here is a FanFICTION-Board – yes, in the bible-section, too) and second because I like stories with a shifted point of view: It challenges people to think about your and then the original message.

In your story it seems clear to me, that Gods acting was cruel and merciless. Now – when there is some pity for Cain and one has lost the typical, simple classification in good and bad – one can start to think how Gods acting was in the original story...

Bye,

Sunuxal

This is an awesome description of what it might have been like for Cain. You give the reader so much sympathy for him. I love stories that dramatize Bible stories without really losing the original message (or going into ground that could be considered blasphemous). Have you ever read *The Book of God*? It's really good. Your story reminded me of it. Anyway, great job! :-)

*boggle* good! wow. last part was very touching.

It's nice to hear the story from Cain's perspective, though not condoning his actions.