Aaww i really feel sorry for th guy. :/ thot this was great xo

oh, a story about Aberforth, lovely, he was one of my favorite characters in the last book, since he wasn't evil or good but more neutral (and I'm always a sucker for those characters).

Also somewhere between book 5 and 6 I really started to dislike Albus because of his calm-yet-sneaky-yet-godlike personality and this story does something J.K. didn't do so well. It makes Albus less of a Hero and more like someone whose life spiraled out of control.

You've let Aberforth commit crimes (like the goat, loved that), gave him secrets to keep, illegal ones, but ones that never affected others like the ones Albus kept. In the end, both of them are just as bad, but Aberforth doesn't pretend to be someone he's not, which makes me like him all the better.

You've got a real knack for writing characters that balance on the line of good and evil, and you've made the other Dumbledore amazingly believable, even more than Albus himself is in the books (maybe because we all know such a person can't excist)

Either way, this is amazing, I don't think I've ever written a review this long about a oneshot. Keep on writing!!

Khajit

I was just flicking around and found this and thought I'd give it a read. So glad I did! Aberforth is a really difficult character to write because there is so much angst and mystery about him, but I really feel I know him in this piece. Thank-you!

wow, i really liked this piece! Aberforth's a great character with a lot of potential, and you portrayed this with marvelous dexterity!

So many differing emotions for a seriously underestimated character. Great foresight and insights into the character,though the line that really gets me is:..He never told Albus.

Now that's sibling rivalry for you. The shots are great - good job.

I liked this very much. It is very touching!

Hey there...
This was very good--it's nice to see Aberforth get some sympathy and some explanation. So good on that part.
However, I couldn't help but notice that there were a few issues with the spelling of names of some of JKR's characters.
First, with 'Arienna', JKR spells it Ariana.
Next, with 'Lilly', it's spelled Lily in the books.
Just felt like I should point it out, sorry if it offends you.
Overall, it was a very good story. Very nicely done. Good job.

I liked this. Some of them were rather deep, but nicely broken up by the random insert of something amusing. I can definitely see a 7 year old wizard tricking his brother into eating a vomit flavored bean. And I really liked the bit about taking Snape's place at the keyhole. Not sure why, perhaps the way it was worded.

This is absolutely lovely!

This was very insightful and definitely gave me some perspective into Aberforth's life and his POV.

I liked all of the creative ideas you have in here. Especially the goat/mead part! Hilarious! :D

Aberforth seems very attentive. He notices and knows things Albus doensn't. The only thing I'd have to disagree with would have to be the Mirror of Erised segment. I feel that Albus really does regret neglecting Arianna and that he does not harbor any need or want for much power anymore. That's why he's so content with just being the Headmaster.

Overall though, very nicely done! It got me thinking! Thanks very much for the good read!!


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... Very powerful. This develops Aberforth on so many levels! I think we're seeing some of your student side, because this is meticulously well-written.

...all the things he never told Albus... all the things he feels...

... The only thing I disagree on is that Albus was a better man. With this perspective, I'd have to say it was Aberforth, because Albus would never say that for his brother...

Just... wow.

Aw, I liked it. Especially the last one, or when it says that it doesn't like Albus playing chess with people's lives or the one when he say that he knew that Moody wasn't... well, he wasn't Moody. The only one I didn't like was the one about the mirror of Erised... Dumbledore didn't see himself as the ruler of the world!

I liked the fact that that was very simple, honest and too the point, much like I htink Aberforth would be but there was some darkness too. It was a good kind of imbalance.

I loved it. Especially the line: "When he told Albus about Harry’s Anti-Umbridge study group he finished by saying, 'Dumbledore’s Army…that’s what they should have called the Order of the Phoenix, isn’t it?' He pretended not to see the hurt in his brother’s face." It captured Aberforth's bitterness and anger towards his brother so well.

That was nice ;)
Good look-ins into characters' lives, Aberforth seems very.. observant xP
Though I think "He knows that when Dumbledore looks into the Mirror of Erised he sees himself as the greatest and most powerful wizard of all time, the supreme ruler of the wizarding world. When Aberforth looks into the mirror, he sees his sister, alive and happy." is not true, at the time (after Ariana is dead and Grindelwald locked up)I think Albus wants his family too. Though perhaps that's only what Aberforth is thinking...
Brilliant xD
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