Not badly written, although some of the twists were kinda weird. (Just happened to fly through a gun store window, kinda way foreshadowed the gunshot death. Putting guns in Ranma kinda leaves a sour taste in my mouth anyway. Anyone who can get hit by a 2 ton boulder is not going to be penetrable by your average bullet. And anyone who could accurately throw 500 punches in 3 seconds could catch one.) but I didn't feel the song fit with the story. It was a bit too upbeat for a bloody, knock-em-down fight to the death.

The beginning was a bit contrived too, maybe explain how or why Saffron would fuse with Ryoga (He kinda doesn't even REMEMBER Ranma after being reborn. And Ryoga gave up on Akane at the same time...)

A few sentences seem to be... weird... "Unknown to him unbidden a sentence came to Ranma’s lips with a deep sad sigh" seems to be in the wrong order or something as its hard to make heads or tails of.

The way Akane reacts at the end seems to be a bit contrived as well, though I've read quite a few "It was a dream, now go confess before it really happens" fics, some have it instantly happen afterwards and some draw it out. After what they went through at Phoenix Mountain, and before, this can't have been the first time one dreamt of the other dying (Ranma having nightmares of Jusendo is done often, mostly well. See "Fragile" for example) and many may have characters overreact to these dreams.

All in all, the story has potential, but could do with some cleaning up and fleshing out. Maybe have this be one of the straws that breaks the camels back as it were, happening after or before a 'real' major fight.

Great songfic dude! The transformers movie came out in 1986 not 1985. Party on dude!

ooh this is scarry, great job.

Wow. That was good. Although, maybe you'll want to try using itallizing, bolding, or underlining the lyrics so we can tell the song from the story.

Great job, though. I loved the final battle between Prime and Megatron in the 1985 movie. True, it was sad to see Prime go, and he wasn't even able to fully kill Megatron, as that sonofabitch came back as Galvatron.

Props.

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