Yes, I forgot my password for this place- what of it?

Get chapter sweety. The insanity of you and your friends comes out well in the story. (That's meant to be a compliment by the way :D)

Can't wait for more... talk to you on DA

Sorry can't be bothered signing in and I think I've forgotten my password... but anyway...

Can I hear a Yay for Thay!

YAY!

I was sniggering just reading the end bit lol. Oh and i thought u liked zeke, and i still say ur in love with colledge boy (kevin) :D

UNLESS YOU ARE THE AUTHOR DO NOT READ
i have a bone to pick with you, and not one of those nice rubbery dog ones either that just bounce around harmlessly, a gargantuan one (ooh i like that word gargantuan) I KNEW BILLIE PIPER WAS A SINGER. now thats out of my system... ahem right well ... i dont think your portraying me as mad enough, i know that if someone tried to chuck me out of the tardis i would charge back in with all my might, which as you know is a lot and i doubt even one of the gladiators ( from the show) would be able to stop me. youve seen this strength for yourself so more madness please. WOW ive written an essay lol.

Aw! I liked Rose. She was awesome! Thank's for that...

OXOX
Dalek Avion

NEAT! More story. *grins* poor Rose, wandering into a fangirl group... totally confused. Although you'd think she'd be more suspious of those girls, saying they know the about the TARDIS and the Doctor and that. And I dunno if you've ever been hit in the head with a bucket- let alone a metal one!- but it hurts like you wouldn't believe.

and your grammer... *tutts* seriously- beta! or atleast a spellchecker.
-"Upon bitter judgment..." should be changed to "Against her better judgement, ..."
- "Taking in the appearance of the girl she was shocked to see her wearing ¾ lengths shorts..."
why is she shocked? seems like normalwear to me (unless there's a gaint sipder clinging to her chest and eatin' her brain, that's a terrible word to use)
- pucunnation is off in quite a few places
- I think you've switched verb tenses through this whole chapter; you need to watch that
--"Picking up the pace he failed to notice the pair of eyes which watched him go by. Eyes holding an evil look." Seems off, but I can't pinpoint WHY...
this sentence-group- thing is just plain freaky:
Strolling along the Doctor whitened on, completely unaware that his companion was no longer with him.
"You know Rose you're being awfully quiet" He stated "and that usually means you've wondered of"
Turning around he smirked to himself
"Right again" he muttered "seriously one day I will find someone who gets the 'don't run of' command"
Fixed like this:
"You know Rose, you're being awfully quiet," he stated. Pausing in his stride, "and that usually means you've wandered off..." The Doctor glanced over his shoudlher, and sighed. "Fantastic"
"Seriously, one day I will find someone who gets the 'don't run off' command," he vowed to the sky.
- and why are we in italics?

Crit aside, good job lev. :D

yay you need to keep updating ... i will really love you if you keep updating regularly

I really like your story so far. You never know, I live under the Sydney Opera house with a cat and a poltegist named Thoedore.

Oh and thanks for the reviews!

yay you dont know how happy youve made me =) i love you =) fankoo ... god no ones been updatinglately =( so its made me amazingly happy

crimony- that's a lot of OCs to keep track of...

and, 'Leven, for the love of raisin toast- please get a beta! It's gettin' a bit hard to understand... I'd be happy to beta for you even...

I think Jack would disagree with you about the dancing Sec... lol.

very cool Buchy... I know nothing about Phantom of the Opera though... so I have no idea who Erik is *laughs* funny how Sec doesn't understand what wrong with him...
why isn't the TARDIS translating the french though?

Whe!

That's what I missed! MISTLETOE!

((Smacks self))

Well, at least Sec got a kiss.

And Erik too.

Brilliant! Thank you!


Mongy
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woah i havent been on fanfiction for ages like a month OMG lol so this was good cept it shud hav had katherine going MINCE PIES at the top of her lungs

Good short story I would really like to sea this continued though