just write smore.Its good. I like it!

I'll take over the story... I don't know if it would be good after I wrote it, But I would be proud to take on the burden if this wonderful story unless someone else has already volenteered.

OH! this is good! can't wait for more!

Awesome idea! Great story!

Well, it's definatly going to be an intresting story once you got it up.
Just a little tip:
Try and make it longer and you'll get more readers (probably).

Look forward to reading in the future~

-Zola/Kamii-

Okay, does Brokenstar just want Smudge in his Clan so that he has more warriors, or is he actually being genuinely nice? Because I don't think that EVIL Brokenstar would walk up to any old kittypet and ask if he wanted to his Clan. Good story, though, I like the idea!

-Darkstorm