I really liked how you wrote this. In the tv shows, movies, and even in other people's fanart, they always make Splinter out to be this know all being. Yet i loved how you were able to make him into something more. A more real father, someone who was leaning to be a father, someone how is still learning to be a father. I really enjoyed reading this.

*satisfied sigh*

The whole Leo pep-talking Raph up the pipe? So so so great. It's wonderful to see interaction with both of them that doesn't involve fighting, and instead involves teamwork.

As for your main-plot, I feel very much for Don's plight and the pressure he was put under. I love Raph dearly, but I wouldn't want to be his keeper for the life of me.

Splinter's guilt is also very well done.

And three cheers for a cute and happy ending!

OMG a homage to the Don and Casey interaction in your first movie!! Wow! I forgot how much I loved that whole scene.

But this was even better:

"Where are you going, Raph?"

A dismissive snort. "Out."

"Yes, I gathered as much." Slow words. Careful words. "Care to get any more specific than that?"

"Not really."

"Well, will you at least do me the courtesy of letting me know when you'll be back? And could I possibly have a polysyllabic answer this time?"

A flash of eyes, a flash of teeth. "Later."

...M, that's just perfect. A bit ouch, and a bit lol all at once. Very very nicely done.

Wonderful tense, well written, and IC! I really enjoyed it!

As a Raph fan, and as a fan of his interactions with his father, I especially enjoyed the end bit, with Splinter's thoughts on Raph and Raph's own-- almost shy-- reaction. Very very squee-worthy.

Great great work!

I too liked the unexpected twist of Raph as late bloomer.

Yay, you finished! Thanks for this great story! I like how everything wasn't exactly perfectly resolved, just like in a regular family.
But I must wonder about the chibi story with Don and Mikey...why was Don smashing his monitor? Hmm...
Anyways, great story, and a happy new year to you, too! :)

Yay, you're alive! I love this story. It's a great glimpse at the stuff we haven't got to see related to CGI-verse. And more than that, it is so nice to see chibi scenes with some DEPTH to them! Very well done. Please keep it up!

XOXO

Winnychan

Well, all those rewrites paid off because I thought chapter 4 was great. You did a wonderful job.

Dude, I just found this, and I love it! I always think of Splinter as the Sensei instead of the father, so I really never thought about how he raised them and had to still be a Dad and could be scared of it. This is a really cool look at that, and i love the flashbacks. Chibi stories are awesome, i agree, lol. I think you did a beyond excellent job, dude. I loved it.

Donny's Boy, thanks for all the effort on your part in getting through your "chapter from Hades." I really enjoyed these stories; it's quite obvious how much time you spend on them. :) What I appreciated most was the insight into Splinter's character, and & Don's realization that his father isn't perfect. You gave both characters so much dimensionality, so much humanit... and you gave ME so much to think about!

If I can offer any con crit, it's that I did occasionally get a little lost in the chopped up scene shifts--like I wasn't quite sure which wequences were taking place NOW, and which were memories. But I enjoyed it very much, great job!

Cheers,
KameTerra

Ah, well it was a rather curly chapter, I admit. It took me a slow reading to piece them together, cause I had to remember what happened in the previous chapters for this one to make sense~ and much sense it did~

I guess Donny just felt frustrated at everything, and got a guy who likes to create things, ending up with mistkes of bad choices is something he had lived to avoid... no one's perfect, but some people sure try to be, and though old, Splinter aint perfect either, no matter how much his sons like to vision him ot be~

What a truely fascinating and in epth take on the 2007 cartoonverse! I am really enjoying the characterizations in this story. I think " Leonardo was not the son who was most like his father." is my most favorite line... I had never thought about Aplinter in that way before, but reading this it makes alot of sense. Brava!

Donny's home, and Raph isnt going to turn him into mitsmeat! 8D; that's good, wouldnt have been a good welcome party if the missing turtle couldnt attand, now would it? And I can see Splinter will need to have a good long talk with Donny after this, though I wonder how Don would react to it; o_o;

Oh man, that was beautiful! I realy liked the Leo and Raph flashback, especially Splinter's last observation that Leo would make a great leader. :)

And I liked the slow progression of Donny's return. The reunion made me tear up a bit. :)

One last chapter? Hopefully of Master Splinter and Don reconciling.

Awesome little fic!!

The story is wonderful and the interspersed flashbacks really add something to it.

My only issue was that while the italics vs. standard text broke up the sections nicely, it was sometimes difficult to tell what I was jumping into when the font changed. I kept expecting one font to be present and one to be past.

I liked how you had Don go to Casey as he probably would have in the Movie 1 or 2 universe! You don't see that very often. Usually authors have him going to April leaving Casey purely for Raph. Nice touch!!

The end there where Raph looks like he's going to hit Don rather than hug him and changes his mind at the last minute is great. Wonderful little fic!!

Cheers,
~pacphys~