Hm...it was okay. I thought the 'I love you' was a little...no, a lot sudden, and Fang was somewhat OOC at the end (he would never, ever say 'Ohmigod'), but it was decently written with a very nice lack of spelling or grammar mistakes.

You can take this review however you want. It's not really meant to be positive or negative.

Aw!
I love Fax!
This was great,
~MM

I LOVE IT!

WOW that was amazing omg that was unbelievable absolutly amazing

omg i loved it lol

Good. It was.

God this is really good.
I love this kind of writing and stories, and I love Maximum Ride. But finding them both together is like... Hunting for fleas.
Sadley, I just can't seem to write this and Maximum Ride together either. Maybe now that I've re-read the books it'll be easier... Whatever!
Anyway, nive job.

aw - so sweet. :) and so much *drama* in one night! whew! you should do a follow-up :)

I'm in a lazy mood here at 7:30 am...been awake all night reading fan fics and refusing to comment lol but this was so good that I actually did. :)
I loved it. It was definitely a tear-jerker. I have to say that I've read too many sad-because-they-die-and-no-one-warned-me fics so when I saw the warning I scrolled to the bottom just to make sure it didn't say, you know, "as the last breath she would ever take slowly trickled out her mouth, he pressed his lips to hers one last time" or something to that effect. When it didn't, I went back and read the whole thing. Awesome.

that was FREAKING AWESOME!
i haven't yet managed to find a fic where fang cries and it's not for some stupid reason. i could only ever imagine him crying if max had died, but i was trying to envision an ironic way max could die (not something eraser/School/flyboy related) and you managed to write it in a non-corny way.
i love ur stuff!
u rok!
=)

EXCELLENT!

I like it please continue!!

Wow. That was amazing. Fang was so realistic.
Keep up the good work!
Tseas

that was awsome
really loved it

I liked this a lot, it was very good. You are very talented. There was one point where Fang said "OhmiGod," which was a bit unFanglike, if you know what I mean. Even if you just wrote it out as "Oh my God" it would fit a little better. That's all :) And if you have time, I would appreciate it if you could read my story, Until the End of the World; it's my first fic. Thanks, and again, amazing job!