brilliant work - one of the best I have ever read...

Even almost 4 years later I still can't understand why Clark doesn't just change clothes and meet Martha on the street.

Well I'm about halfway through your story- and boy have you made a lot of progress. I expected this story to be super angst ( since 'crisis' is in the title) but I've decided that I like this better than short bits of intense angst. You combine lots of charming details with excellent character development.

Fav bits:

1. Richard's dream of the super family. That was awesome! That's how I want my kids to be! :)

2. Henderson shooting Clark and Clark playing dead.

3. Clark and Lois. "do you think I just dropped from the sky...?"

Fav character(s):

Jason. This kid is adorable!

Really, all your characters are amazing. Lois has a lot of depth. Clark's thoughts and habits are interesting and highly realistic. The only characters I'm not so fond of are bruce and Alfred. Bruce has lost his angst and general darkness, and Alfred seems more... Trivial. But they aren't really important characters in this fic anyway, and I'm being harsh. They just don't seem so great because Clark and Lois are so much deeper in comparison.

Anyway, I'm lovin' it!

K. So I lOved this! Definitely going to keep reading. Trust me... If you can wrangle a review out of me after just the first chapter, you've got talent! The uh 'post hospital brain fart' was magnificent! I loved the conversation between Martha and Clark (only because u have springy knees!) but I was laughing the whole time because of the cops. Gorgeous.

This is a nice story, and I liked how real-life it felt sometimes. The killing of all the bad guys at the end was a bit too convenient though. This is the second story I've read were Clark, powerless, purposely gets caught in order to find Lois and co, and I really like that situation. Keep writing!

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ABSOLUTLY AMAIZING!

I WANT ANOTHER ONE LIKE THIS, LONG, AND PERFECT CONVINATION OF DRAMA AND ROMANCE.

This is absolutely the best story I have read on Superman, no on all of so far. If you havent written and published anything original yet, you should.

I loved this story! when i was on about chapter 10 i looked to see how many chapters there were and i had to do a little happy dance when i saw there were 63! Great writing, and the plot was a little confusing at the end with everything happening so fast but the emotion was wonderful! I was ready to cry at some parts!

I think you wrote the chaos of the planet's bullpen well, and the urgency was definitely something the reader could feel.

Just a bit of medical info for you, a lot of times after a CT is done, usually MRI's are done of the brain for better pictures of where the stroke occured. I can tell you did a bit of research about strokes, as that you knew strokes can leave someone without the ability to speak, which is called "expressive aphasia." "Receptive aphasia" would mean the person can't understand what you are saying to them, which can also happen from a stroke.

This chapter was one that made me smile, quite a bit, as in fact the same silly grin is still plastered to my face.

I liked that you used the idea of Clark proposing to her in just a t shirt and jeans, the real deal, if you will.

What I've always had mixed emotions and I've seen it in fics before when Superman and Lois Lane part ways publicly. It makes sense, but it leaves me with a sour taste in my mouth. But then again, maybe it's supposed to. I did appreciate how you went into a bit of description about her "replacement" Wolfgang as his new press contact, because I think the background about him makes the reader warm to the idea of him. I know that it did for me.

The bit at the end, *swoons* ah I'm such a romantic at heart. Loved that bit...and there goes that goofy grin again, it's back!

So Jimmy really did have it figured out; and the dialogue between them was great.

I also really did enjoy the conversation between Clark and his uncle. Just as an FYI for you, toward the end of the chapter there are a few parts of dialogue between Jimmy and Clark, where you must have cut something but didn't consolidate some what Clark was saying, which makes it a bit difficult to follow. I just wanted to bring it to your attention in case you missed it...I know I do all the time when I post things!

As for your haste to post it even though you weren't satsfied, I just can't do it! I do get to a point where I'm not entirely thrilled with it, but sometimes feedback from others is more positive than I had thought, and other chapters that I loved to write only recieved ho-hum responses. You just never know what people are going to be attached to or not!

This chapter had so many wonderful moments of contentment that you wrote so well! "Balm for his patchwork soul" I love I!

But what I really liked, was amidst all the fluff and happy moments, was the dark lingering sadness when Clark sat at Perry White's desk and wrote an obituary for him. It was a bit of bitterness to a very sacharine chapter, but much needed to keep the balance just right.

When Clark was finally able to fly again I was so excited for him, you did really a well job of describing his feeling of freedom again and I could almost see Superman just flying through the clouds and sky! Thanks so much.

Sometimes poetic justice is what makes us smile, and I'd bet you too! I think you had a lot of fun writing this chapter. I mean, we always have fun writing, but some chatpers are definitely more entertaining than others!

Cliche's are fun sometimes, I have fun with them whenever I write. Another great chapter. And most of your medical info is pretty accurate. And if you've ever got medical questions, just shoot me an email, I'd be happy to help! (work in medical field)

OH. My. GOD. You killed Perry! I love that man, I think I'm going to cry. But then again, in reality, there are often times that everyone remains unscathed in situations like that. Besides, it's probably how he would have wanted to go out anyway, not decrepid, old and wasting away. I guess it's a perfect way to end Perry's life/career. I just wish he would have found out that Clark was Superman. (kind of )

I tell you what, you write action so well! It's so hard for me to write action, but these tight compact scenes are great. I was a little confused at the end of this chapter whose body Luthor was holding, but mabye you've left it that way intentionally, I guess I need to keep reading.

Honestly, I was a little glad to see Luthor...and whew..."Don't fuck with me." Yup, he's a nasty, nasty man. Just the way I like him!