LOL Good story. Best line in this chapter:

"That," Nightfur interjected, "or we wanted to have some story that sounded cool."

Your grammar is good too! And your spelling. You don't make you're your or too to.

LOL I LOVE NIGHTFUR!! Much better than NightCLOUD -hiss-

PWNiN STORY =]

Haha I like Nightfur all moody and such. I hope you will use her more!

hi i'd like you to add Sunkit- an orange she-kit w. bright blue eyes and a white patches on her feet and chest. I want her to be Firehearts apprentice later in the story if its ok

Ohh... I loved this story. It was great. I couldn't stop reading. :D

~Scartalon

YES!

Yes, I love it! *huggle*
--Cloudy

I never enjoy endings... but good! Post the sequel soon!!

We DID enjoy it!

good end, i like it

Great story! You've prabaly already decided, but I think 1 is the best option.

wow, tis over already? well, twas good. i like the 1st title, tis full of awsomeness!

Maybe "Starless Blue Clouds" instead of "Under the Starless Blue Cloud". It's shorter =]
Me likey.
--Cloudfire

your storie is awesome! and your funny!