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| Luiz4200 2008-08-01 ch 14,  | abuseI only have two doubts. One: Robo-Bots? Not even Jack would be that lame. Don't you mean Jack-bots? Two: Why are some parts of this chapter being repeated? |
| Cataclyptic 2008-08-01 ch 14, | abuseI didn't really like this chapter... I mean, Raimundo just comes forwards to Ganandorf, and he starts to grab him by the neck? without any kind of retaliation? seems unlikely. |
| Cataclyptic 2008-06-22 ch 13, anon. | abusenice chapter. Again, work on grammer and such. and, you need to describe things in more detail, that way we know whats going on. otherwise, the idea is good. |
| Luiz4200 2008-06-14 ch 13, | abusePlease update. I'm glad to see the monks using their new abilities. |
| Luiz4200 2008-03-11 ch 12, | abuseRaiKim forever. Good job. |
| Luiz4200 2008-01-30 ch 11, | abusePlease update. I wanna see this battle. And I don't know what to think about this new penname. At least it's more neutral. The other one yelled 'I'm a Xiaolin Showdown fan'. |
| Cataclyptic 2008-01-19 ch 10, | abuseI like how this story is turning out. it's spelled "B-e-a-t" though. |
| Luiz4200 2008-01-09 ch 10, | abuseGood battle. Please update. |
| Luiz4200 2008-01-04 ch 9, | abuseDon't worry. It's good. Please update. |
| Luiz4200 2007-12-19 ch 8, | abusePlease update. I wanna see who's gonna use the sword now. |
| cataclyptic 2007-12-10 ch 7, anon. | abuseVery good! use more personality and it will be even better. |
| Luiz4200 2007-12-01 ch 7, | abuseApology accepted. Please update. |
| megasean3000 2007-11-30 ch 7, | abuseNice. Omly you still call keep saying "Ganondarf" when it should be Ganondorf" 'kay? |
| Luiz4200 2007-11-26 ch 6, | abuseThere's some balance on it. Last chapter was focused on villains. This one was focused on heroes. Please update. And make Zelda surprise Omi (probably all but mostly Omi) with her skills. |
| Cataclyptic 2007-11-25 ch 6, | abuseI like the story, but you have to give them more personality. |