In hinds sites, sucks. The story line is to short, moves to fast, and where the hack did they get collars, they didnt react the way they whould if they suddenly became pokemon 2 out of 10

coud u plez make a sewil ps.sorry about spelling

cool plz more and soon plz

THIS REALLY HAD NO ADVANCESHIPPING, IT WAS ALSO REALLY BORING (NO OFFENSE BUT I REALLY THINK YOU COULD DO BETTER)

say this sound interesting i am a very big advanceshipper

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That was great!

this story is interesting, i'll admit. can't wait to see what happens next

havent wach pokemon 4 5 years now but good please

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Hi there. A little thing about your story, Ash's Charizard is a male, not female. If you don't believe me watch the Pokemon season 1 episode when Ash gives up his Charizard to the Charcirific Valley. Other than that it's a great story and I was wondering if you would like to be my friend and maybe put yourself in the story with a few friends.

Very nondescript. The dialogue is illogical, and overall, it's just too short. Even though Ash and May have just been mysteriously turned into Pokemon, there's little to no sense of wonder among the characters. Completely illogical, but keep trying.

one to watch out for. I agree with Tamerofdragons, slow it down a bit, and perhaps expand on some of the plot.

Keep it up and i look forward for the next chapter of this one.

Gettin good!! As a fellow writer, not trying 2 brag or anything, but try to slow down the pace of the story plz!