I think you need to use better grammar, as the story is a bit hard to understand.

Other than that, think up a twist and make it interesting. It could be good!

please continue its a great start to the story!
lol i love how frank was like "it better not" in
true frank style.

check out my bh fic i just wrote
called "My Pictures Of You."
please review

Please continue! i love the Erica and Dan relationship!

PLEASE PLEASE continiue!! I love it!!

Yay for Dan/Erica fic!
You should continue with this one. It has potential :)

Hey,
I really like the Ideas that you have in this story, and i absolutely love the Erika/Dan thing which me and my friends have taken to calling Dikki...sounds odd, but whatever..
The only thing i think that would perhaps make your story easier to read is a little less cliches and maybe some more describing. If you added in little describing words people aren't really used to seeing then you are likely to gain their attention. Just you a thesaurus lol...thats what i do when i run out of words to use.
I think you should continue with what you have started, i really wanna see some more Dikki! :D So please, keep going, i plan on it with mine, cept that first chapter was kind of out of the blue seeing as i just kinda wrote it in like 2 hours lol... oh well... :D
Hannah xx