Just to let you know, it is possible to create a story with chapters. This fic, with the four parts so far, would probably be more appropriate in chapter format as each part follows the next consecutively. A story is bumped to the top of the list whenever a new chapter is added so you don't have to worry about it getting lost and if you change this into a story with four chapters then it's easier for your audience to read. After all, with a chapter story you just hit the next button at the bottom or top rather then hitting the back button and searching for the next part.

Other then that, your story is awfully jumpy so far. For example, you go from your main character (who I assume is Revan) who is sleeping and dreaming of Carth straight to Atton flying poorly without making it obvious that Revan was actually dreaming. Besides that, is she dreaming a memory? Is it a wishful dream? Is it even a dream? I can't tell and I'll assume that no one else can so I just get confused and a little bored when it suddenly goes from Revan dreaming to Atton flying like crap without Revan ever seeming to or reflect on what could have been a very nice dream.