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| shadowoverlord279 2008-07-31 ch 24,  | abusegreat chapter! can't wait for the next 1! |
| shadowoverlord279 2008-07-31 ch 16, | abusewat does daisuke mean!?!?!?!?!? |
| Ugaritic Mot 2008-07-29 ch 20, | abuseSo far this story is great. I know this is probably a bit lare but does Uzumaki no Kuni mean Whirlpool Country? |
| Rhivin 2008-07-21 ch 24, | abuseGreat Chapter! I wonder will shikamaru go with them. What will happen with hinta will she hook up with garra? Oh so many questions, I can't wait to read the next chapter. |
| Ruler Of Twilight 2008-07-17 ch 23, | abuseStory Report Storyline/Plot:9/10 Character development:7.5/10 Length:10/10 Originallity:10/10 Jutsu Variety:11/10 Average/Total Score:9.5 Comments: I'm not too crazy about the idea of a crazy hinata, but it is realistic, up until to chapter 24, when she just forgets, she would usually have some type of grudge towards Yugito at least, until she gets over it. The jutsu variety was some of the best i've ever seen on FF. And you're very good on showing translations. Develop more on Sai's and Haku's characters, so far they are just minor characters in the background, that you want to know more about but do not. Nice Length, 24 chapters with 1 chapter being at least 10 words, you're doing a very good job. Overall, Great job on this story. I look forward to reading anyother stories you might have to offer. |
| Sweet Heavens 2008-07-15 ch 24, | abuseI feel the quality is suffering here. It is slowly turning worse for some reason and I feel repelled by it |
| Hiroshima Namikaze 2008-07-14 ch 24, | abuseO_O holy ** that is nice but wtf is the rain for? |
| Hiroshima Namikaze 2008-07-14 ch 23, | abusekill the ** hinata! i mean good chapter very good ^^ |
| superninjamonkey 2008-07-13 ch 24, | abuseNot bad, there are some grammatical and spelling errors though. |
| Menumber1.11 2008-07-13 ch 24, | abuseyay, you updated. :) I cant really decide which of your stories I like better now but im looking forward to seeing fox's Idea developed a bit more, but this story is more far along. A question I have is how long is this one going to be and will you put any lemons in? One point I dont like is hinata being a match for yugito (or at least seem that way) yugito should have obliterated her. One grammer error here; “A lot of the council members believe that Naruto defected to Kumo since he left with a Kumo kunoichi, even if she had already announced her independence from Kumo, and the relations between the two villages have not been the best since that time when they tried to kidnap you when you was (should be were) a baby. Things could really get out of hand.” Shikamaru answered her. Im pretty sure that you made a mistake there. not 100% there. (Some english grammer is really weird.) |
| Broken Sexed Up Bloody Kitt... 2008-07-13 ch 24, | abuseHm... Loved, update ASAP! |
| kyuubu no kituson 2008-07-13 ch 1, | abuseThat was great! |
| call sign FireFly 2008-07-13 ch 24, | abuseWow, this is the first fic I have read with Haku staying a main character - FireFly |
| bumike99 2008-07-13 ch 24, | abuseGreat update liked the battles |
| Forever Rahhel 2008-07-13 ch 24, | abuseTotally forgot Ty and Sakura met in the last chapter. It surprised me that only one year has passed. Kyuubi being playful is fun. Keep it up. |