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IAmYourPhobia 11/18/09 . chapter 1lol Quite amusing. XD |
27's Fury 5/25/08 . chapter 1LOVED IT! especially the ending! : 'Alicia stepped back and sniffed the air, her nose wrinkling in distaste. "Is...Is something burning?" "Oh, crap!" ' LMAO funny! hope you make more! |
pinktiff1989 2/19/08 . chapter 1I love Alicia and Ben stories. I love how this one shows their day to day life. |
epalladino 11/22/07 . chapter 1Very cute and just like them. Thanks, Beth Palladino |
penny3 11/11/07 . chapter 1Cute story. "Many of her sculptures centered around her love interest, Ben Grimm- or more famously known as The Thing." I'd take the word "or" out of that sentence. "'Know from experiece', huh?" Ben said over the loud sizzle of bacon and eggs. Ben's third word should be "experience" I loved how Alicia refused to say anything negative about Ben Grimm, even when he'd be a bit down on himself. Ben's insecurities do make a nice touch in this story. Him claiming to be completely okay with his transformation and moniker (in the films), just doesn't sit well with me. "He glanced down at the hands he had grown accustomed to seeing every day since the cosmic storm." His powers didn't manifest themselves right away, so this sentence doesn't make sense. I'd change "the cosmic storm" to "his transformation". |