Wow. Thsi is possibly the most twisted and most brilliant piece of Pokemon fiction that I have ever had the pleasure of reading. It's too bad that it seems to be dead as I was really chomping at the bit at the last chapter there.

Usually, the rare times that I actually browse the Pokemon section, I always find cutesy, happy Pokemon and repetetive 'pika pikapi pikachu' crap which gets really annoying after a while. I love dark fics more than anything, so this fic was just begging to be read. The way you handled the animalistic nature of Pokemon and the Ashchu/Pikachu/Pichu interaction was brilliant. It's rare to find that kind of stuff here on this level without getting into the M rated category. Anyway, hope you update soon 'cause I really want to read what happens!

And also:
The mental image of Ashchu in an Elizabeth collar had me LOLing for a while. I got a lot of wierd looks from my friends.

Are you going to continue this? I LOVE IT!!

This is... wow. Very good.

I love the way you describe pokemon. It feels very real, very immediate.
Too bad you'll probably never finish it...

-SW

O_O

Too sad for words.

I love this story cause you are really descriptive and I love stories with a lot of descriptive paragraphs in them!

This was so emotional!

Poor Ash. His pikachu insticts took over him after he mattd with that female pikachu. The cage didn't help either; it made him forget his name! Good thing Pikachu was their to save him!

Ash is a father? OMG!
It was so nice to see him protecting them!

OMG!

Ash (in Pikachu form) has tp "BREED" with a female pikachu! Damn, I thought I would never see that!

Though it sounds...odd, I loved reading that last few paragraphs!! Fight the temptaions, Ash!

This fanfic is so awesome! I love your writing style. Sucks that it's been almost a year (five days shy by my watch, lol) since it's been updated. D: I'd leave a more critical review and comment on actual events within the story, but you don't seem to be writing it anymore, so I'm just leaving a message saying I really like what you started. :P

Wow. This is totally epic. I hope it's not too much to inquire about if you're going to continue this or not. Don't leave Ash hanging!!

Wonderful chapter! Very suspenseful and exciting.

Really wonderful! I'm glad that you took out #4, thank you! This story is very touching, and even though it's in the Pokemon universe, it's very realistic and natural. This is what it would be like if it were real.

Oh, I love it so so much! I am so awaiting your update; please do update, aha! This is so touching and beautiful, *clenches chest*

You know, this story would be all the better if you didn't include that little disclaimer in your author's notes: "4. No matter what sort of weird subtext you want to read into this thing (and I know some of you will!), this is NOT a Pikashipping story!"

The best part of anything is being able to imagine a subtext, even if it's unintentional. People like to interpret things their own way, and you should let them. It's not about pairings and shippings, but allowing the reader o draw their own conclusions about subtexts.

You seem so cool, too. Please get over yourself.

Tis a good story... I had conflict in my heart while reading this.
XD

Oh, pleasse, please, let me read the next chapter... please.