wow...I LOVED it! very sad...but poetic.

keep up the good work!

And a poet, too!
Hm. The Riddle (of Tom riddle) needs to be capitalised.
The rhythm to this was soothing - which is a great juxtaposition to the quiet anger, the protectiveness, the bitterness, the pride.It's fascinating to see your Bella from a perspective other than Sirius'. Have you ever written Voldemort's perspective on Bella?

Anyway, I'm going to pop by the forum and then off to bed! *yawns* I'm exhausted =)

You're a remarkable author, Bella dear
Love,
The Cheese =P

'No matter how much fire, Bella won’t burn.'

Oh, you are determined to make me smudge my eye make-up, aren't you? Ah well, this is beautiful. And that line up there was so fantastic, and oh dear now I am crying. If that was your mission then you succeeded! I really should stop listening to Evanescence and reading sad poems at the same time =S.

-Huffie x

that was so sweet he really did love her and i can't stop reading it

Aw, very sad, great job!
Just one thing: I didn't really like the title. My Girl or My Bella or What Has She Become? might have been more fitting, but that's just me.
Otherwise, AWESOME job!

Your characters have real depth, which is brilliant. I adored Sirius in this, obviously, because I'm an insane Sirius fangirl sadly. I also adored the little touches, like Bella not crying because she knows Voldemort will save her.

Great stuff.

Cuba

Beautiful! :P

I loved this. It was really emotional and it gave me chills. Your stories are always good and you give the characters alot of depth. Your fanfics are quality work :) I wish I could persuade JK Rowling to change Deathly Hallows abit and redeem Bellatrix! She shouldnt have died! She probably was one of the best written characters in harry potter. You could totally see bellatrix as a real person. I notice alot of your fanfics are about bellatrix, which i love. Bellatrix fanfiction is so interesting :)

lovely