I Love this story so far!

I have received the announcement about your new twillight story. I am not a very huge fan of twillight so I did not really get hooked - sorry. But I fall back on your luke and vador's stories...And I read it with the same haw than the first time !

It’s fitting that Vader would free the slaves.

“There were no stairs or elevators, so the stormtroopers quickly began to abseil down to the factory floor using grappling hooks and cables. Vader jumped down, using the Force to control his descent. The troopers instantly began taking out the droids, and the slaves began to yell and cheer in surprise.” I can see this paragraph play out really well; it would be awesome to see in movie form.

“But Luke's shout had stirred something in Vader. If he should die, who would save Luke? He had a reason to fight ... not anger, or hatred, but ... an emotion he didn't dare name.” I really loved this line; it took Luke being captured for him to admit it (even though he won’t spell it out), but Vader loves his son.

Although I am sad to see their story line end, Val and Crix did get a good exit from the story here.

Me and my love of father-son genre (I call it popmance) really loved Vader tucking Luke in. It’s sweet.

And it ending with Luke calling Vader “father” and Vader calling Luke “son” was PERFECT.

As in Orphan, Threat was a masterpiece!

“Luke was so very innocent ... he was the best thing he had ever had a hand in creating. Yet, like everything good that came his way, he had driven him out.” It’s interesting to see Vader go through that “you don’t know what you’ve got till it’s gone” stage of loss.

“It took a good minute for Ben to be gently coaxed back into the room.” Like a frightened baby animal…. Actually, Ben’s pretty brave. Not many would actually choose to put themselves anywhere near Vader’s presence. Ben’s a good friend.

I was a little surprised to see the villain from Orphan back, though, and I cannot remember any hints to him being alive in earlier chapters. I guess that’s what Vader gets for not obtaining the body after he had plunged a lightstaber through it the first time.

Man, that fight between Luke and Vader—Luke telling Vader he hated him, and Vader telling Luke he never wanted to be a father—that was intense, with all that tension between them that’s been growing throughout the story thus far finally boiling over. I wonder what Padme would think about all this… What’s the saying though? Things tend to get worse before they get better.

From massacring all his dueling droids, to ruminating on his “failure” at fatherhood, Vader going through intense and extreme bouts of anger and guilt does his character justice.

And, the end of this chapter shows why its never a good idea to wander off with strangers.

"I will make sure he never sees this boy again," Vader said, tossing the databook aside in annoyance, "He is leading Luke astray." The “it’s not my child, it’s your child” response. It’s like the attribution effect, but especially for parents. Vader is, at the same time, a typical and atypical caregiver.

Hah! I loved Ben’s dad making a small violin reference!

I wonder if LJ did get to be assigned to a comedy club. He was a great OC. In either case, this chapter did give LJ a good exit from the series.

“The Emperor leaned back in the throne. He didn't seem so frightening anymore. If his mother supported him, like the HoloNet articles claimed, then maybe he wasn't so bad.” ….. “I only wish she were still alive today - she would cry tears of joy at the good we have managed to achieve." *face palm*

Wow….you have written the Emperor PERFECTLY. Actually, more than perfectly. Creepy, manipulative, all with that misleading gentle and frail demeanor.

“Perhaps he should talk to his master first - Luke's version of events could be highly distorted.” More like the Emperor’s version of events could be highly distorted.

“’I read it on the wall in the girl's refresher,’ came another voice.” The girl’s refresher? Huh. For some reason I think it’s humorous that made it as school bathroom graffiti. Probably because way back in my high school days, there was almost no bathroom graffiti, and it was usually the so and so loves so and so variety.

I loved how Lev so explicitly diverted Luke’s question about what a concubine is.

Spoiled, ill-mannered, rude, and of little intelligence? Geez... Though, Luke only taking issue with the bad manners part of the description was funny, in an exasperating kind of way. Seriously, Luke? That kind of reminded me of the time Leia called Han a scruffy-looking nerf-herder, and his response: “Whose scruffy looking?”

The last line of this chapter: depressing.

Again, I love how you include things from the movie—the trash compactor—but you apply it in an original and entertaining way in your own story.

I when exactly Vader held onto the projector before he decided it was useless, or that he couldn’t bare to look at it anymore.

I like how Luke and Ben are just searching the compactor for the toy, and then it just bumps into his leg all of a sudden.

A pre-hyperspace era Axion-Comet….. I wonder what the StarWars universe was like back in the day, without being able to jump to hyperspace. Incidentally, if there was a pre-hyperspace era, how would a senate be possible. Interesting.

I laughed when Vader referred to Ben as “the extra one.”

B-60 interpreting the fight between Luke, Chilee, and the other kid as a bonding ritual was priceless. For such a bored sounding droid, he’s funny, though it’s unintentional on his part.

I think it’s great how you move back and forth showing how outsight and subtle the Empire controls and dominates its subjects: with the violence against the protestors, to something as banning a book a movie was based off of.

It was cute reading Luke and Vader play fighting with the lightsabers.

But, man. Luke going against a dueling droid? That was intense. I like how you incorporated Luke losing his hand, as well.

“Perhaps I could start my own magazine, Vader thought. Sith parenting - a guide. What to do when your master wishes your son dead. How to fit in fatherhood with your Sith lifestyle.” Even though the situation is pretty grave, that line did make me laugh.

“Twins. Vader considered it for a moment, then decided it was better not to. He was struggling to cope with one.” I love how you touched on that.

"You may," the doctor said. "There's little point in you sitting around here. But come back straight away if you experience any pain. In the meantime, stay away from lightsabers. Or you'll end up looking like your father." I go wide-eyed every time I read this. As in, I can’t believe the doctor would actually say that, and in front of Vader, no less. Wow.

“Luke resisted the urge to roll his eyes. All he wanted was some pocket money, and his father was talking about 'following a path' and his 'destiny'. Had he ever lived in the real world?” I love that line!

Ah, poor Luke and Vader. They seemed so in sinc while fixing 3PO, too. Oh, well. Tension always makes for a great story. But I guess Luke learned a good lesson: if you have to sit there and think for several minutes if you should or should not ask someone a personal question, the best bet is to hold your tongue…

I love B-60. Though, if droids got a vacation, he’d need one. I think it’s great he has an excuses list.

I kind of wish I had seen more of Lee throughout the series. Oh well, though. The series was great regardless.

And I think it was great to have Artoo and C 3PO reunited with Vader. I wonder what Artoo thinks about Anakin now.

It was really chilling reading Vader exploit the spy’s love for his son in order to get him to crack.

I never thought it was that possible to fail that bad at laundry… but I guess if I was using a high tech machine only designed to be operated by droids, I guess I’d fail, too.

The part where Lev has to correct himself, and spell out to Luke that his father wouldn’t actually kill him if he breathed on one of his speeders, was the part where I tend to mark the tension that will mount out of Vader’s murders and Luke becoming aware of that situation. It was not exactly explicitly done here, and I like that.

The tension at the end of this chapter was done well, also. Luke not wanting to live away from Vader, but hitting a wall, as it were, that was built by Vader’s demand that Luke be independent and operate outside of emotional attachment.