|Reviews for The Four Riders|
| Juria 5/5/09 . chapter 3
Nice, very nice. I eagerly await the next chapter. :D
| Juria 5/5/09 . chapter 2
I like this story so far. It's got an intriguing beginning, and so far, I wanna read more! :D
| Juria 5/5/09 . chapter 1
Hmm, cool. I'll toss my OC ideas your way eventually. :D
| Bubble Toon 7 1/14/08 . chapter 1
OC’s Name: Erin Dennis
Description: Strawberry blonde hair pulled in a ponytail, bluish-grey eyes, and wears silver glasses
Personailty: Cute, girly, smart, fashionable, perky, but gets mad, acts dump, crybaby, boycrazed but not around people.
Age: 15 going on 16 (On Feburay)
Powers: Water, Ice, Plant, Magic, Super Speed, Strength, and has a weapon called the WaterIce Sceptor.
What stage you want them to appear in: The Ghost Zone!
| Beserkians fury 1/10/08 . chapter 3
It's a good thing I've learned to be patient thanks to my Undead Demon Dragons. You need alot for these guys. Good story. Keep going! Until next time... FARE THEE WELL FOOLISH HUMAN!
| Cosmo Phantom 1/7/08 . chapter 3
This is a good story, I like it! update soon!
| Cosmo Phantom 1/7/08 . chapter 1
Cool, I have some oc's you can use if you want to.
OC’s Name: Taylor Ross/Shooting Star
Description: Long messy brown hair, blue eyes, a black Phantom of the Opera T-shirt, and dark blue jeans.
Personailty: A wild child and is not very bright. When she got his by a shooting star giveing her powers, She then learned to take more responsibilty. But she still is wild sometimes.
Powers: (if they have any) Her alter ego is named Shooting Star. She can shoot stars out of her hands, fly, and strength. (note: She is new at this so she isn't the best hero in the world, she makes mistakes.)
What stage you want them to appear in: Townsville
Hears another one.
OC’s Name: Austin Fetherwinkle (weird last name, huh?)
Description: Messy brown hair, green eyes, white t-shirt, white jeans, white angel wings, and a gold halo.
Personailty: A guardian Angel in training. He is clueless but sweet.
Powers: (if they have any) He can fly and telaport. (sometimes he forgets how to telaport)
What stage you want them to appear in: Fairy World
And the last one.
OC’s Name: Angelia Halo
Description: Blonde hair, blue eyes, White robe, white angel wings, and a golden halo.
Personailty: Her blonde hair fits her pesonailty. She is pretty dumb, and like Austin, she is a guardian angel in training. She also has a small crush on Austin.
Powers: (if they have any) She can only fly.
What stage you want them to appear in: Fairly world
Thats all of em'. Can't wait to read this story!
| Fortune Glyph 1/7/08 . chapter 3
Awesome job! Update soon and did u get my message last night?
| tomboyishgirl108 1/7/08 . chapter 3
Good thing Danny saved Carrie in time! I hope they find Jake and June soon! :)
| Sharidaken Tranqity 1/7/08 . chapter 3
Nice chapter. Cool to see Danny & Carrie in the Pokemon world. And they met Ash as well. I hope the Eds and the Teen Titans will appear in the story too. Maybe even the Kids Next Door, Samurai Jack, Megas XLR, and much more... from Cartoon Network and Nickolodeon. Please continue.
| Sharidaken Tranqity 1/7/08 . chapter 2
Wow, nice intro. This story is starting to become really good. I can't wait to read more. Not to mention me and my OC's to appear as well.
BTW, you should read my stories, Final Fiction VII and Angelic Naruto. I know you haven't watched Naruto or Angelic Layer before, but you could check the show out thou a bit on youtube or cartoon network. Also you should check out Angelic Layer on my profile as well. You'll love it trust me.
Also, could you check out my up coming trailer for my newest fan fic, Cartoon & Anime: Friday Night Power Jam! I need more votes on it still.
| Solartiger 1/7/08 . chapter 3
Nice job with my OC, keep it up.
| Sharidaken Tranqity 1/7/08 . chapter 1
Okay, I think I'll give this a go
OC's Name: David Langheier
Description: wear a black short sleeve shirt, tight black pants, long black coat with silver metal designs on it, a small belt, thick shoe laces around my neck, lots of straps on my boats and arms, and ware chains.
Personailty: Personality: David when he was young was very happy and excited to do almost anything, now after 6 to 8 years in Fan Fiction he takes his life more seriously. He’s sometimes laid back or cool when he’s not fighting, other wise he’s serious and has no affection when fighting his foes, but has a soft spot when he knows that they had enough or when someone important to him is hurt or dying. He can be quite romantic sometimes with Sasami and Téa, and has some feelings towards Layla and Lucy or any other girls he doesn’t seem interest in. When meeting someone new he’s either gratefully generous or sometimes not trust worthy seeing there appearance sometimes.
Powers: General, Strength, Skill, Will or powers of the Gods. David abilities are any power he can gain, General, Strength, Skill, and Will. He is also given powers by the gods of Olympus to use against his enemies, or any other gods from different planets. His weapon is the shield sword with the blade attached to an armor shield for protection. Sometimes he grabs any weapon usually to him. His special weapon is the Daevi Khadge, an Orb of light. Only David can wield it, no one else. When use of fighting, it transforms into a giant massive sword crystal made like and only moves or swings around by the hands of The One. Once stabbed by it’s opponent it destroys them for god as there soul is sucked inside the Orb’s power and vanishing there body into light or dust allowing them to never come back in the world ever.
Stage: Townsville with the Ed's and maybe the Teen Titans if thats okay with you.
Description: Look her up on Fanart Central or Deviant Art
Alanabeth is a cool, tuff, cutie, popular and clever young girl, who loves making friends and meeting or seeing all sorts of people or things. She’s a bit of a Tomboy but loves doing almost about everything, she can be a Jack of all Trades when it comes to things very exciting. She may be cool, smart, and hot, but she does have some manner problems sometimes like burping in public or eating like a pig, but she’s still a cool lookin’ gal. She has a monster crush on David, but doesn’t show it to him thou, cause she’s too shy and knows he’s dating someone already, but she loves hanging out with him, even his brother Moe and all his friends. Alanabeth doesn’t know anything about her past very well nor does she know anything about her parents, but she seems much happy without knowing who they are and where she came from. But her most darkest secret of all times is, that she’s the daughter of Lord Darigan which Alanabeth really hates and doesn’t want to ever be caught by him. She hates her own father for even making her in the first place and wanting to have her do bad things for him. Unlike her two siblings, she is the only one who’s pure human and wasn’t full of evil and hatred, which would cause her to become an evil being, thanks to her mother. She gets very up set about it sometimes and would try to find someone who would make her feel better like David, so she could calm down from the stress she’s been through of knowing her truth. Still… Alanabeth stands tall for her friends, and never gives up, she will fight Darigan and his minions to the end until he has been stopped and her past has been revealed to her.
Alanabeth is always hanging out with David a lot and mostly Yugi and his friends. The two people who have a big crush on her are Joey Wheeler and Tristan Taylor who both envy each other and fight over her a lot when ever they are not both with her or one of them are with her without the other, which they both hate so much. Alanabeth loves the two of them and always spends time with the two of them whenever she wants to be with either one of them. Usually he sees them when she sees Yugi and David but sometime one of them will come to meet her so they could be with her all by themselves. Besides Joey in Tristan she truly loves, she has other crushes too, like Seto Kaiba and Duke Devlin, but her true crush and love than anyone else is Tristan who is always protecting her a lot when she’s endanger or in the need for help, he’s always there for her. When she’s not with the boys, she likes going shopping or hanging out with Téa or Serenity sometimes, shopping or dancing. She even duels as well after being inspired by David & Yugi, especially Tristan who encourages her a lot. But when it comes to have super powers she also can join a team of superheroes like the Teen Titans. After showing the Titans what she can do and how well she can do it, they excepted her into the team to fight off crime. She’s a very big help to them and is mostly good friends with Starfire & Raven, which Starfire enjoys having around a lot and Raven who appreciates someone who she can communicate well. She even hangs out with Beast Boy a lot sometimes, works out or trains with Cyborg and Robin in the gym as well to test her strength. Beast Boy may think she’s hot like Terra, but Alanabeth still loves Tristan even thou Beast Boy may seem like a ladies man. Robin himself has to admit Alanabeth is strong and beautiful, he sometimes has secret feelings over her but doesn’t want to show them or mention it to her in front of them team. But Alanabeth loves doing anything, dueling and becoming a superhero.
Powers: Powers: Dark Magic, (Most likely Raven’s and Jinx’s powers mixed together as one.) Mind Creation, Mind Thought, Black Gloves Spell, (A spell she can do from her hands like Starfire’s starbulbs only there black.) Transportation, Levitate, Curses, Many Different Dark Spells, Healing Creation, (This allows her to transform ruins, or destruction back into once it was or a beautiful place.)
Stage: Battle City with Tristan as his girl friend. She's my OC gf for him.
Description: He had dark brown hair with light green eyes, wore a black jacket with the sleeves curved up to his elbows, a black tight T-shirt, brown jeans, brown belt, brown boots, brown gloves, black collar around his neck, and a brown beanie hat.
Personality: Moe is David’s brother who appeared coming out of his head. He was miscarried through the entire ancestor’s of David’s family, but seen the eyes of all his ancestors and knows all the history that happened in the past, in other words, instead of knowing about it, he lived through it. He was once from an early time before David's’ life where he lived in a planet known as the first earth, which was once the first earth every made until it got destroyed. He was a leader of a secret military force known as the Imperial Gards, (The “U” is taken out cause the Imperial Guards has been taken by something else.), who were invincibly in all there battles, cause they could never die from death, they made a pact to give up their youth of being old and limits of there life. But what turned out to be an unexpected force whipped out all the Imperials until they were relieved in the 8th earth, which was the planet of Fan Fiction. Now he lives with David has a younger or twin brother even thou they don’t look alike, he is very found of David and always likes to be with him and help him out in anything he needs. David doesn’t mind having a brother, in fact it was something he always wanted when he had nothing but sisters, so Moe to him is very important and is fun to have around. Moe wears a jacket that he calls his magic jacket, which he is very bond to, it is his special use in life and to most things, with the jacket he can do thing 100 times better to most magicians themselves. He can have anything appear from his jacket like objects, tools, dimensions, people, places, or things, Moe can do anything with his magic jacket, and it can even transform into any shape he wants it in. Moe lives David a lot and would never turn his back on him or get angry at him, he was the reason why he was able to be alive again, there for Moe cares and likes David as his brother a lot, especial David himself.
Thou David enjoy the cartoons, Moe is a little unpleasant with most of them. He doesn’t know how it came to be when looking into the eyes of his own brother but getting cut off when he was in a coma and had the new eyes. But Moe seems to get along knowing what he can do mostly. He’s a good friend with Edward, Alphonse Elric, and Naruto Uzumaki, he never thinks or calls Edward small even the first time they met, and he thought that Alphonse was a sissy robot knowing Al has a sweet voice and doesn’t sound much of a man, but most of the time Moe likes wearing his armor a lot for his own which Alphonse doesn’t mind if he doesn’t try anything stupid. He is very supportive over Naruto and is always encouraging him a lot on his missions and his training, there for Naruto thinks of Moe like an older brother he never had. He once tried getting Sakura to fall in love with Naruto but thought Moe was just annoying as Naruto not until how much she later on liked him and thought he was way better than Sasuke and cuter too, which made Naruto jealous and yet another boy fan for Sakura which Moe didn’t like. He sometimes hangs around in Domino City a lot knowing how much things go on their like dueling but further more he like going there a lot cause of one sexy dueling known as Mai Valentine which Moe really liked and admired. But Mai wasn’t interest in him at all, but still Moe wasn’t going to give up that easily for his love over Mai. But that was when he met Joey Wheeler’s younger sister, who had a huge monster crush on him just like Téa with David. Moe didn’t really notice her feelings for him but he did know she always like to talk to him a lot especially when she always wanted to see him. Moe like Serenity a bit and thought of her as a good friend but when Serenity confused to him that she loved him, Moe was in shock that Serenity said that and didn’t know what to say to her. He liked Serenity but wasn’t exactly in love her as he was with Mai, so he tried to ignore her for awhile or just avoid her. But sooner or later, he then started to realize that he was beginning to fall in love with her and thought that Mai wasn’t the girl for him anymore but Serenity was. He soon confused his feeling toward her, and then soon they became boyfriend and girlfriend right after their first kiss, which Serenity wanted to most from him? This made her feel much better, and made her thought she might be with Moe for the rest of her life, living together as a family. As for Moe, he never leaves Serenity’s sight, always watches over her, and defends her all his life from anyone he tries to harm her, he will never let anything happen to Serenity for she is the one he truly loves the most.
Powers:Invincibility, Can do anything unreality (In other words, do random or magic things like BoBoBo and The Fairy OddParents.)
Stage: Battle City as Serenity's boy friend.
So I hope this is goo enough for ya. And for me and my Oc's I would like David to be with Tea, Alanabeth with Tristan, and Moe with Serenity if that's alright. Hope you update soon.
| Beserkians fury 12/18/07 . chapter 2
Okey, here's mine.
OC's Name: Lance/ Half-Drake
Description: Human: About 5'11", rather muscular, not pumped but strong non the less. Chestnut hair and hazel eyes. Wears a white T-shirt with a Black sholder riped vest and bluejeans. HD: A tall Drake (slight variation of a Dragon) with Blood red scales, hair and eyes. Wears tattered version of Lances, only bigger. Is 7' tall with wings too.
Personality: Born into a relm where magic is a norm, he realized that the ones who he called "Mom and Dad" weren't his real parents. So he went to find his parents. Along the way he realized he had Drake powers. He soon found that his parents were killed by Dragon Slayers. He was sad, but he soon learned that they were evil Draks. The Slayers had found him and took him to their village. Is very loyal to whoever he befriends, and will do anything for them.
Powers: Can control fire in both forms. human/ Is powerful with magic and sword, is usually called The Wepons Master. Any wepon he touches, he knows everything about it. HD/ Can brath fire up too 9,471C. Weilds a massive blade called DragonBlaze. Flight. And slight control over time.
What World: Unknown Please.
Until next time... FARE THEE WELL FOOLISH HUMAN!
| Alter Shead 12/14/07 . chapter 2
Wow, this sure was a rushed story! I like the way u didnt want us to be bothered with how the things happened, and decided to jump right into the action of the story itself. My advice: Build up in later chapters of how this happened! I like this chater, i had no flaws whatsoever, grammar mistakes were either not there, or unnoticable! I liked that! ;)
Anywayz, I hope its not too late to post my OC:
OC’s Name: Alter Shead
Description: A white caucasian male, with messy dark-brown hair, white t-shirt, black NY cap, black jacket, ripped blue jeans and white sneakers.
Background: Most people dont know, but he is the true son of Satan! When Hell was destroyed, he was saved by King Mickey, and had grown up in the Disney Castle. When he became 12, he ran away to find a new life in a town called Virtop Town! After he and his new friend, Dennis, were kidnapped by Predators, and after seeing his friend die at their hands, he had first used his move "Cataclysm", wiping out all of Virtop Town and its inhabitants. He now wonders around, as he has made new friends with the authors, cartons and animes, and tends to fight the forces of Darkness alongside with them, never backing down.
Personality: His mostly, your average hero. Courageous, adventurous, friendly, and has a deep sense of justice. He can be clumsy at times, but he mostly cares about his friends, and sumtimes more of himself. Lets say, he can also be the funny guy in the group.
Powers: Universal Translation (Can translate any type of language into simple english!) Cataclysm (An explosive burst of Satanic rage flows out of him, making him able to wipe out any type of enemy he's facing! Only happens when any of his friends are attacked or in danger!)
Stage: Either Ocean, Battle City or Ghost Zone, u choose!