I danced with Penelo. I shared her mis-steps, and her child-like joy in the dance.

Your descriptions of Penelo's comrades were spot-on, and very detailed. Thank you for this.

I adore this, particularly because of the attention you pay to details. The game doesn't get much into the heads of the characters - I've always wondered at Penelo's 'state-of-mind' at this point in the game, and I think you wrote her wonderfully. I've also always enjoyed fics that evoke 'sense of place', and I'm pleasantly surprised to find that in this one. You'd think that with better graphics, gamers would pay more attention to settings, but that's rarely the case. Penelo dancing before Ozmone Plains (one of my favourite play-areas!) as if the whole world were before her - what a wonderful scene. Even her perplexity at herself is written with that joyful, delicate touch. (:

Sweetness. Penelo not quite getting her footing, and looking at her friends and wondering what she had lost...it was really sad, but it was beautiful because she cclosed her eyes and let her body remember again.

I loved all the little mentions of the group...I really, really appreciated that you wrote that Vaan is smarter than any of them give him credit. I've seen so many fics that portray Vaan as an idiot. He's...Vaan, but he really is smart. Loved that he had invaded Penelo's space and stole her blanket during the night. :D And I really liked that Ashe got to see Penelo dance.

Very nice. It flowed really well and the little descriptions were beautiful. The ending was so cute, too.

This was really sweet, pretty much all I want from a fanfic! I like the way you showed the each member of the groups personality through the way they were sleeping, too :)

The writing was so smooth, and the descriptions so well-paced, that I almost felt as though I was the one dancing along. :)

I like this piece. It was very nice to read. You have a wonderful style and your sentences really flowed. One-shots are fun when they are pulled off correctly, and you did an excellent job. Well done. ^_^

~PoG

Lovely description, good grammar and structure, very evocative. Liked it!

Short, sweet, and just darn pretty to read. I loved all of the little details of how Penelo saw everyone around her.

One tiny little punctuation issue: the parentheses seem out of place to my eyes (not the words in them, which are great, but the parens themselves). Perhaps italics for that text or just the text in normal font with no parens? Anyhow, this was a nice little gem.

I loved the writing in this, it portrayed Penelo so well. The setting too, is excelent.

Nice work.