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Spellspinner777 2008-01-30 ch 11,	abuseNice update. I am really glad that you have overcome your writers block, because I have been awaiting this update avidly. There are some grrammar mostakes which need to be sorted, but other than that, Well done. Babel Fish Translation Help Glückwünsche in einer wundervollen Geschichte. Dan
Spellspinner777 2008-01-18 ch 9,	abuseOkay. Good. Better actually. This is possibly your best chapter yet. One little thing that I will you point out... In your summary you really should make sure that spelling is good. Your summary is the thing which makes people want to go.."oh this looks good, lets read that." Try to add a bit of mystery to your summary and well... change "propably" to probably. It makes more sense that way. Your story is developing well but I feel that you might need a Beta to read it before you post it to sort out spelling checks and so on. If ever you nee a hand just ask and I will do my best k? Lets see a bit more enthuasism in your writing style and ask people to read and review your story. there are many authors out there who are willing to do so and give you an honest opinion, so that you arent just generilising to a single audience. Play to all audiences and you will attract more than your fair share of admirers. I just say keep up the good work. Dan
Spellspinner777 2008-01-16 ch 8,	abuseOnce again...Wow. Thanks for sorting out your spelling and grammar this time. It reads much better now. Well done. This chapter is possibly the best so far and it is working well. I like Jack. He is definatly my favourite char so far. Keep it up Amon Shi
Spellspinner777 2008-01-05 ch 6,	abuseGood. I like the fighting scene, although it needs to be more fluid, if you get my meaning. Instead of (for instance)"But then the others jumped back in action" Try mentioning a name and then giving an action. i.e, jack attempted to blast Onnen out of the way, casting a meteor spell, drawing lumps of flaming rock out of the atmosphere straight towards the glowing succubi. for instance. I think its good but it really needs to be spell checked before you post. other than that, well done dude.
Spellspinner777 2008-01-02 ch 5,	abuseStill good. I am liking this storyline quite a lot, but I noticed some grammatical mistake... "are that the thieves?" I think you meant are 'they'. Other than that... Top Notch. ^_^
Spellspinner777 2007-12-19 ch 4,	abuseA definate well done. I really like this story and you write with a certain style which allows everything to flow. A minor complaint, but nothing serious, or needing to much work, please check your spelling before you submit. I have only noticed it in this chapter(4) but it doesnt really matter. I just hope you keep going and... is the drow gonna commit the ultimate offence and get together with an elf? Will the dwarf get in the way and decide he likes the drow? Who knows(except for the author N.L.H) One thing is for certain however... I WILL be reading on to find out.
Spellspinner777 2007-12-18 ch 3,	abuseThat is really really good. Cant wait for more and I love the Seraphima!! Well done Amon Shi!
Spellspinner777 2007-12-14 ch 2,	abuseIncedibly addictive reading! I play sacred all the time, so I know the characters well. Very, very well done. Keep it up. So good to finally see some gaming talent out there. Dan

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