that was super sweet

okay, i just realized. i've been reading this randomly, thinking they were a series of short stories with the same theme...i just reread them, and put them together, and i think an apology is due for my previous reviews(^^_ )
let me start over again. This is one of the sweetest DHr stories i have ever read. and the way you put them is really original. the before, then, and after. it sort of captures the emotion between them, even though i do have reservations about the "depth" of those emotions. but then aain, i'm a sappy romantic, and i enjoy a bit of fluff so...
that being said, i hope u make more hermione/draco stories. maybe even write long one:P

aw...i proclaim this one my favorite! kudos to u for putting so much emotion in such a short story!

i LOVED this one. it was so sweet, i'm just sad it ended this abruptly.

i liked reading Draco's POV.
do u think u could do a sequel?

That was a breathtaking story. I could feel the expanse of the universe in this story.

Ok, I've read the whole fic through and to reiterate one of my earlier points, it is a bit thin on description throughout which could help set the scene so much more and reveal more about the characters and what they feel if used right.

Now a minor, minor plot loophole... where would Hermione get the alcohol from? I'm curious because if Draco is sneaking drinks...

Another thing that wounded your fic in the first three chapters is the lack of a proper time frame... I'm guess several months but without an accurate measure, the fic seems to be lacking in terms of pacing and tempo.

Lastly, your dialogue is a little bit well, below average, no body language - hands, eyes, shake of the head etc.

But what you've gotten here is actually really good having attempted to write from the first person as opposed to the third person. You remembered that in first person, what the person sees, hears, touches and smells are the only things they can know, so that is really well executed in this fic.

Keep writing!

Wel... its an interesting start, especially considering the angle you've taken. Hermione and Draco... always seemed to be the obvious couple for these two if you put aside the overly obvious Ron matching.

It started well, and it was interesting the way you got inside Draco's head and had him pass the time staring up at the stars.

However, I think that you're a little thin on description in a few places, like where exactly he is within the grounds of the castle, and the sounds of someone approaching... if that section had been a little more descriptive, you could have maybe shown more of draco's character.

Speaking of Characterization, I would say that you managed to nail hermione quite well in keeping with the canon of the series, but Draco comes off... well a little too nice to be draco. I know he's lost a lot, but he should still have some of that pure blood arrogance, injured or not he's still dealing with a mud-blood. I think that you've also gotten him too nice when he says thank you... he just would not do that, this early in the story.

WOW. I don't really like Harry Potter stories but this caught my attention and kept it. you are an excellent writer.

very nice story, very nice indeed. I enjoyed reading it.

I am impressed with this story.

I like the way that you portrayed Hermione and her feelings. It's rare to see a story written in first person executed so well. Some writers forget that in first person, the character can only observe what they see, hear, or touch. Unless another character expresses as much, the character (and henceforth, the writer) shouldn't know.

A weak point in the story is dialogue. There are parts when it's good, but there are parts where it's mediocre. I'd recommend adding "body language" (e.g.: moving hands, facial expressions, posture, etc.) to make it seem more realistic.

Overall, I'd give this story an 8/10. It's enjoyable, and there are no serious grammatical errors. (Meaning if there were any, I didn't notice them.) Keep up the good work!

That was really cute. As for spelling/grammar I couldn't notice anything off to kudos there. I really enjoyed reading that!

that was so beautiful! Where on earth did you write like that?! I love how you portrayed hermione and draco's soul..their essences! so utterly poetic!

my goodness, your beginning was fantastic. you describe all the feelings hermione goes through so well and it just really made me feel for her. I just love the star references and well...just your style of writing in general!

that was really beautiful and so poetic! i just absolutely loved the part about god numbering the stars and i cannot wait to read more!