I have just read this whole story and I have to say that I loved it.

You did really well tying it in with the show and Joey's narrative.

I won't ramble on about how good it was but I love it.

OMG!

please keep going!

this is so good!

I like all the characters and the story is moving well, please continue!

at first i was iffy about this storyline, but after i got into it i really liked it. which was why i was disappointed when it didn't have an ending! i want to know what happened to Bebe! how did she disappear? other than that, i think you did a very good job of catching the personality of the donnelly brothers in your writing. :)