Good chapter I hope you finish the story soon because I can't wait to see what happens next.

i hope you update soon the story is getting good

I like the changes to Sara. It's good to see her on Keitaro's side for once.

Wow! I really like the plot of the story! I'll be waiting for the next chapter of this!

I, so have been spending the past few days getting caught up on your story. You certainly have taken things up a notch, at least from the perspective that there are more girls. Even so, the 'accidents' seem to have diminished some (not necessarily a bad thing).

Great scene with Kitsune earlier. Also good to see Keitaro get to use his skills in something other than defending himself. I'm wondering whats happened to Mizuho, she reappears, then disappears again. Seems like earlier you hinted that he had yet another possible promise to her (that he seems to have also forgotten)? Not sure why, but I like her best of the OC's. Am rooting for her as well as Motoko, Mutsumi, and Shinobo. Agree with the other reviewer, with Naru bowing out (for now), need to see the girls put on a full court press and see who makes it. I don't need a lemon, but I would like to see someone be successful!

Have a completely wacky thought... Since Keitaro has been attacked viciously, maybe one or two of the Hinata girls finds out. For example, if Motoko found out what just happened to Keitaro, she could think about what she didn't say or do with Kei, burning her up inside. Next, she would probably see what Kei's condition, possibly breaking down. I could see her swearing holy vengeance against the thugs - going after them like something out of 'Kill Bill.'

If you wish to use this idea, feel free. It would be fun to watch! :)

Well, really good to see you updating again. I was worried that you had abandoned it, but it is good to see you still going at it. What you say about inspiring fanfics is true, and yours is one of the few good upbeat Love-Hina fanfics I've seen for a while, so I hope to see you continue.

As for writing: I think you could do a once-over of your story before posting, there are some words that don't belong in sentences, and some awkward sentence structures that could be fixed. I also think that in the beginning portion, at the party, you could have had more build-up concerning Nannami's appearance, and her eventual kidnapping.

Anyway, I hope you continue to update, and we see more of this story soon.

-Sincerely SAmaster01

I was hoping for an original and creative outlook on the Love Hina series but you really disappointed. First, Keitaro is still the same loser as he's portrayed in the anime, if not more so. Second, the constant (literal) bashings and misandry are getting really annoying to the point where I can't enjoy this story any more.

Ok... Let's do a head count in this Keitaro's increasing list of girls he met. *started counting*... -_- I lost count. And to think these OC girls would be going after his attention, this is cracking me up. Your version of Love Hina really takes up a notch, and more hilarious.

Good thing you got around the writer's block. Looking forward for the next chapter.

hey great job keep up the great work and glad u updated and hope u'll update soon

this has been a great story with very good plot and character development, don;t give up on yourself just because others have.

You know, I think this is one of the only times that Keitaro got hurt helping someone and no one even tried to misinterpret his actions. Though he apparently has two girls he met in Bolivia that want to defeat him for some reason, which could be anything from killing him to marrying him. He seems the type to have that happen. Until next time.

YAY! An Update! Is about time Keitaro in Action screen. wasn't expected in nanami arc.

cool! update soon!

Glad to see you updating this story again. I like the turn this story has taken with this latest chapter. Keep up the good work now that the writers block is hopefully gone.