this was a truly gorgeous story. my god. truly literary, and i particularly enjoy the way it is told in sharp, vivid vignettes-almost as if you were rendering each scene as an individual portrait. i've yet to see any other naruto fanfiction in the same class as this.

Wow. That was so...real. The tiny details (club posters, the appearance of the sculpture, the list of former lovers) really made this. And the setting was great, along with that strange, strange note.

Very good! =0 I like your writing style very much too! Keep up the good work! BTW I loved the way you portrayed the two artists!

I really really really like this fic. You've really managed to capture the essence of Sasori and Deidara, I think, and distilled them into art students perfectly. You also did really well translating their canon traits to the present world, and I just really have no words for how awesome this fic is.

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I want to congradutate you on such a wonderful story. It is truely amazing in all aspects. I really hope you go on to become a writer, because your use of words is just phenomonal! Spelling is the only thing that you may need to work on but other than that your writing skills are truely beautiful along with character deposition.

Great work,
Kuroi Hihane

You're a wonderful writer! Your descriptions and language helped me visualize the characters' surroundings, and even the smells in the environment around them. I'm just sorry they ended up not caring what happened to the other, but other than that, I felt this really captured their personalities. Good job!

A great piece... I love the minimalism in it - you don't really tell the reader much, but it sort of.. clicks anyway. The end was also great. Especially the last sentence, it has such a bitter tang to it... Wonderful.

As a rule, I never read fanfictions featuring either Sasori or Deidara as main characters, simply because I don't find them particularly interesting compared to many of the other characters in the show. This means that when I find a fanfiction about them that I really like, this has nothing to do with my fascination with the manga/anime, but only with the quality of the writing!

I love your images of colour and places, especially how Sasori remembers the sand (which he keeps finding everywhere on himself) and the description of the fireworks (which leave the skies "smoky and burned out"). The illustration of Deidara's story through his clothes and actions (as opposed to Sasori's brief explanations) is a wonderful idea: you manage to give him a full-rounded personality without actually describing his past life, the events that must have occurred that made him what he is.

Throughout the story I kept wondering how you were going to end it (surely two persons who are so radically different cannot work together?), but I was still quite surprised, and in a pleasant way, by Deidara simply 'disappearing', leaving Sasori to imagine possible futures for him...

Sorry for the long-winded comment, I got carried away - and thank you for the story!