er... whomever this is (who has the black hair? hm...), they certainly know how to go off the deep end.

brittney

I loff it. Totally nomming it. So very prettyful, and with a nice original plot development.

But... "He was never one for white." Not consistent with the flashbacks (this would be fine if it was more dramatic of a change from past!Arty to present!Arty (i.e., if he hated Minnie for dying, and thus hated her wearing white/being pale/innocent in!retrospect)). Maybe change to "He was not one for white." or, gah, just something less absolute. "He was not one for white anymore." *can't think, or word things properly, or preserve the lovely rhythm of your line*

Hearts,
Eff Haych

-pokes Liv- Is it really you? x]

Wow. I loved this... It was so... different. It was mysterious, in that purposeful way... Did that make any sense? Anyway, it was teh awesome xD

~Nikkeh

Great! I think it was really good, though it could be a bit longer.

Aw, Liv, that was great. Angsty and mysterious but not at all overdone. I wish you would update The Chronos Assignment, but I understand busy. Crazy, crazy, mad rush. Can't wait until winter break until I can finally sit down and write.

Great job!

Lily

Wow, really nice story.

I just, err, can't really tell who the two characters are.

Arty and Minerva?

Hm... I like it. Very well written. However, it's a bit... Unfamiliar. How can I put it? While it was good, it feels a bit... UnLivish. Not like you wouldn't write something like this, but the writing itself. NOT LIKE YOU WROTE IT BADLY! But... I can't explain it.

Anywho, as I said, I liked it, although I was kinda confused.

Evie