i like it. very intricate, although i imagine edward would be after living for so long. interesting take on the transformation. i also cannot wait for the movie and especially breaking dawn. yay!

That was soo amazing. I think you got him in perfect character. I loved it! Fantastic job!

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Amanda

I love this story so much! Like getting inside Edward's mind. But I have a suggestion. Can you make one about Bella actually having a child? Like a sequel or something?!

Love the story!!

this is good very good you have done Edward very well.

depressing. you have embodied Edward perfectly! kudos

Wow. Extremely well written.

That was really good! Are you going to leave it a oneshot, or make it a story? It would make a good intro to a 'breaking dawn' type story. Either way, Edward's emotions come across really clearly. Good job!!

It's so...Edward. I can tell. I think that his thought process is a lot like this. He over thinks things way too much. Anyway, it was really good!

wow. that was beautiful. you are wonderful with your descriptions and use great vocabulary. keep writing!

That... was...so...GOOD! I think you did a good job capturing what Edward feels. It almost made want to cry for him. You should write more.

Hey... loved your vision of Edward.
Really good... endearing, over reacted, over thought... just like him, the I see him...
Good going!
Congrats

You write so beautifully! I loved it! You put so much soul into it! An absolutely captivating one-shot! Beautiful!

Great job!

~ Oni-chan