So much wrapped up in a short tale. Nicely done.

Scarily un-romantic.. but breathtaking.

Wow. Intense. I like it.

SVSD

Sad, but beautiful. This scene:

"You could have broken me."

She was so close. Through the cold water, he could feel the heat of her body inches away. He could still turn, take her in his arms...he could still... "I would rather lose you."

A sharp intake of breath. The hand on his shoulder fell away. "And so you have."

Was absolutely breathtaking. Amazing job.

*smiles* I liked that. Short, sweet, with good thoughts, motivations, and insights. Very nice.

Wow... Beautiful... In all its sadness...His own dreams are hopefully happier... I really hope you continue with this piece..!

Beautiful ! Hauntingly Beautiful !


please continue

That was very good.

Nice! Very good. Well-written. Bittersweet and the sour tang of frustration oozes from it, like so many things in life do.