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| skywalker05 2008-01-18 ch 3,  | abuse"where [no] civilians were killed by falling debris? I loved this fic untill the last paragraph, which I don't think was needed: but noting the mention of Dustil, it may be explaining some backstory/conspiracy that I just don't get. So Dustil did something...but not knowing what it was, and only hearing about it at the very end, lessens the impact. The takeover of the Republic by the Sith (name them, please) was handled well, artisticly, surreally almost. |
| skywalker05 2008-01-18 ch 2, | abuseInterseting concept. It's a pity that Revan never snaps out of the very plausible funk, though. I'd like to see more about what she was halucinating before he really arrived. The dialogue is good. I'm confused about how Carth and the Exile got there and why "You (Exile) want us (Revan and Carth?) to leave you here,", and why it's then Carth that stays on the planet, indefinitly? *is confused* Some typos didn't help: "you was still braced against the wall". |
| skywalker05 2008-01-18 ch 1, | abuseThe title confuses me. They seem reuinted to me...or do you mean outside this story? *shrug* I'm fond of CarthRevan, and the awkwardness and clever wording about the awkwardness in this fic were good, but my favorite thing about this chapter is definitly the snarky Exile. lol! One critique: "she began, but didn’t have a chance to finish because Carth had bounded up the loading ramp and was kissing her." just doesn't flow right, perhaps because of the 'was'. A typo: "just short of loading ramp". Enjoyable little fic! |
| Uilleand 2008-01-01 ch 3, | abuseAh, I meant to leave a review for this ages ago but apparently age has withered my brain... Anyway...the first three of these have been really compelling and lave me with a good ache somewhere in my chest - my favourite feeling after a good read! |
| Estora 2007-12-16 ch 3, | abuseGah. WHY have only two people reviewed?! This is wonderful! I loved the first way, the second made me cry, and the third made me fall off my seat with laughter. Even though it probably wasn't supposed to be funny. But, hey, I laugh at most things... You've really got a talent for writing, and this? This is going straight on my favourites list. Well done. It's really difficult to get there... Regards, ~ Estora ~ |
| Lady Tragic 2007-11-24 ch 2, | abuseI love reunion shorts. Can't wait for 3-5. ~Tragic (Ain't I just?) |
| Mithostwen 2007-11-20 ch 1, | abuseAw, this is really cute! I'm looking forward to seeing what your other four ideas are--not all of them happy, I'm guessing... You did the awkwardness and humor very well, though there were some distracting typos. Overall though, nice job. |