Wow, this was very good. I like how you made it feel as if this could have been anyone (even though it was obviously Sirius). You have a really great voice and the style of this was almost poetic.It had a nice flow. You don't find too many fics this short that are this good.

despite it's short length I think you interepted the song very well. The story had a very eerie feel but I liked it; I could picture it all, especially the 'crying when you thrust into her'. I almost didn't read it when I saw how short it was because most stories this length are not very good but this story is just the opposite. I loved the point of view because despite you never describing it as Sirius but as You, I pictured Sirius the whole time. I wished you had more feeling but it was wonderful. Great job!