Reviews for The Twelve Days of TyHil

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ToraHimeSama 2008-04-12 ch 8,	abusewow...O_o...that conversation was pretty deep, and kai wants marshmellows...interesting. can't wait for the next chap.
ToraHimeSama 2008-04-12 ch 4,	abuse...blah blah blah...XP that was too funny. i love this chap
ToraHimeSama 2008-04-12 ch 3,	abuseKAWAII! it was so cute how she just fell asleep on his chest and that she jumped from her window and fell in tyson's arms
ToraHimeSama 2008-04-12 ch 2,	abuse...aw well, the cooties part was expected seeing it was tyson, but it was still cute
ToraHimeSama 2008-04-12 ch 1,	abuseaw that was cute, he spent a lot of money on hilary...anorexic hiary tatibana? that's weird didn't know she was anorexic. but still cute chap, the beginning was funny when kai was like what the hell is she gonna do
allconspirer 2008-04-03 ch 8,	abuseInfatu-whated? I laughed so much at that! Loved the chapter, update again soon!
chicago77 2008-03-24 ch 8,	abuseawesome awesome awesome awesome! keep going plezz!
StZen 2008-03-23 ch 8,	abuseLove this story! =D TyHil are so cute ^^ Do continue soon!
sanaa 2008-03-23 ch 8, anon.	abusethis was one of the best chapters yet! i luved the talk tyson and kai had. though kai was VERY OOC. but w/e. i still luved it. update soon!
distantheart 2008-03-22 ch 8, anon.	abuseKAI AND FUN?!11 seriously Daichi was right..."thats a new one".. neways i liked it.i hope the next chappie is up soon. and --1)there is no word such as "hidded"... the past tense of hide is hid. 2)when Kai goes to the roof he says..."Like I've said..." it should be "like i said,.." thats all i can see now.i'll tell u if there are more.am not being a critic.just telling you your mistakes...flawless writing makes reading more interesting...just a peice of advice... ok too much.bye...UPDATE SOON. u can PM me too.and the story i wrote u commented upon,do u think i should remove it??i'm planning to write another soon... i have improved a hell lot "promise"...
Inner Dragon 2008-03-22 ch 8,	abuseI just loved this chapter...made me laugh so hard. hahah. thank you so much for that
Sony89 2008-03-22 ch 8,	abusevery very very good! i loved it!
In Darkness Is Light 2008-03-10 ch 7,	abuseThey kissed! Ahh! It's finally happened! ;) I must act in Kai's defense though: he is not a human glacier! He is just a little less expressive than most of us but he has a heart! (Although he loves to yell at Tyson when he misses/is late for practice) I loved Tyson's one liner: "It's amazing what you can do when you think someone you care about could be hurt," he finished quietly. "It kinda makes you learn how to do things and fast." It's something so true and something oh so very Tyson-ish. :) Nice work on the chappie.
In Darkness Is Light 2008-03-10 ch 6,	abuseI think I actually liked this one the most! It seemed the most plausible and older!Hilary strikes me as someone who might actually suffer from insomnia. I also liked the reference you made to why she got along so well with Kai. Furthermore, her and Tyson's midnight banter was very believable and that's probaably how their conversations would go; Tyson would just have to mention something about Kai in there. XD Just a bit of concrit: [Sighing, the champ used the white light of the winter night to view stove] I think you meant to put a 'the' in there right? ["I'd be drining cocoa."] drining, meet drinking. Sorry if my reviews seem to generic; it's late and I'm feeling very subdued at the moment. If you wish for me to elaborate on any of the reviews, PM me and I'll be more than happy to do so.
In Darkness Is Light 2008-03-10 ch 5,	abuseIt was short and sweet. :) Geez, people assume things so quickly though. If they see a girl and a guy who are friends (even though in this case both want to be a bit more ;)) they immediately think that the two are together. sigh I know this all too well. Not that kids in hospitals have told me...but the guy I play tennis with and me are always the victims of ruthless teasing. What Tyson said at the end though: "We're just...us." That was so adorable :)

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