I love your description of the other Fai sitting with the other Kurogane.
It was just such a "you could be happy" moment.

Long live KuroFai.

Very good character interaction. I especially like the concept. Good word choice and imagery.

Correction:

"And even if he did hurt Fai with his words, it would only be a matter of hours before the lanky man forgave him an all would be fine again." An should be and.

Good job, that was really good:P

I liked it, since you want to know. ^-^

I thought it was not bad.

Honest-to-goodness I think you did an excellent job with the characterization. The only thing I might mention is that I was a little confused at the beginning until I realized what was going on (Wow. That was redundant. *lol*) You did, however, do a very good job capturing Fai and Kuro-chuu. ^_^ *gives you a shinyshinyshiny gold star*

X3 Kuro in denial is so cute!! Don't worry~ the characterization is just fine =D

YAY for pure KurFai fluff (and angst of course, they wouldn't be them without the angst).
I think you did a pretty good job there.. I'm hoping to read more of your stories soon!
^__^

Very cool -- I love that they met themselves in this world.

And your KuroFay fluff is made of win. As is the writing.

Happy Thanksgiving, and good work.