Dun. Dun. Dun. Loving this so far, can't wait until i can read more! (Bedtime lol)

Is that, like, the end? 'Cause if so, that was a really great story! If not, UPDATE SOON! Lol! If it was the end, is there gonna be a sequel? Am I asking too many questions? I still don't get why Belinda was in Slytherin in the first place... was it because all of her family was in Slytherin, or what? 'Cause her personality doesn't fit that of a Slytherin, in my opinion. I think I'm going overboard with questions xD Lol!

)Alex(

Both chapters were very good. I'd double check grammar or get a beta, though. You confuse thou and though and his and he's.
I'd still explain a little bit more. Set the scene. But it's getting better.
Content wise, I'm so glad Al and Belinda are back together! And the whole Scorpius impregnating Belinda... shocker!!
Please continue, can't wait for the next chapter!!

Really cool story! Good ending too. Tak for en god historie. I'm Danish, and it's kinda similar to Norwegian, so I'm pretty sure you understood that. :D

First of all, I'm too lazy to log in x.x

SECONDLY, AND MOST IMPORTANT, WHY THE HELL DID YOU MAKE BELINDA PREGNANT? That's so terrible! Unless it's Albus's, which it can't be! I'm crying! Like, seriously, I have tears in my eyes! Way to start my Winter Break--finding out she's freaking PREGNANT with SCORPIUS'S baby!

Unless that's wrong, in which case, please tell me!

Anywayz -takes deep breath- Okay.

Update soon ;D

)Alex(

That was really good. Please update soon, I can't wait!

Please make this a happy ending! This is so sad :( I was crying as I read this chapter!

)Alex(

Definitely getting better. :D Just reread for spelling/ grammar errors. Not that many, but a few.
I can't wait fr the next chapter. Scorpius needs to be kicked in the balls or something. F'in asswhole.
Kimmie

OMG! I can't wait for the next! PLEASE UPDATE ASAP! Thanks for a great story!

I really like the idea behind this story ^.^

Please, update soon...

OMG! Please continue this story and update ASAP. I really like it. Scorpious isn't how I imagined him though, but that doesn't matter. Thanks for an excellent story.

Oh! I really like this story so far! Please update soon! Please, please, please!

)Alex(

oh great story i love it!

Improvement.
The chapter had a center event. Grammar and sentences had a 85% turn around!
Only thing I'd say is write more detail. More reactions and what is happening. You chop scenes, describe a little what happened before and after. Characters can't just appear. And instead of always having a break, if the you are just moving from one setting to another or a place in time, if the point of information you are conveying is the same, then you can just start a new paragraph and write "A few hours later" or "And as they walked to Hogsmeade" etc.
As for the story aspect, uh... I'm gutted! I love Albus! I hope they get back together! I'm a true romantic at heart!
Update soon.
Kimmie

I like this a lot. It is a very good read.