Aww
I kinda lik this pairing
I wonder wat would happen if the lived as a real family

Poor Maika and poor Itsuki. You did a really splendid job at portraying their bitterness and their pain at having been separated. And Itsuki's thoughts on Haine-chan? Just so wonderfully written out. It makes me somewhat a bit more optimistic to know that things will turn out a bit better for Itsuki once he gets to spend some time with his daughter. x3

Lovely chapter, eagerly awaiting some more. x3

Wow...This is really good.
I love this story even if Maika and Itsuki-san aren't my favorite couple.
I hope Itsuki-san finds happiness in this story.(w/ Ryoko-san?)
Please update soon!

Gah! I can't believe I never read this before. This was absolutely brilliant! Itsuki and Maika is not my favorite couple, but I still like it. XD

Can't wait till you update!

-Hikari

I'm intrigued--is that girl that showed up in the last part of the chapter his later wife? I'd be so happy if it was. But poor Itsuki--his pain was so tangible in this chapter. I love how well you're building the angst here. I love this whole story and I'm looking forward to your next chapter on it so much. :3

nice

Mm, lovely installment. I loved the way you described Maika's pain and the way those two deal with their hurt. Marvelous so far. I can't wait to see what happens next because you most certainly manage to exceed yourself with each subsequent chapter. It's fascinating.

I love the breaks you put into this work; they make the pacing so perfect and timely.

Ouch, that really hurt. Poor Itsuki. It must have been truly very horrible to have his birthright given position taken from him only to discover that the real reasoning behind it all is something much deeper cutting.

You've definitely managed to include a lot more emotion into this part of Shinshi Doumei Cross that I didn't pay all that much attention to, I admit. xD Very nice, I quite love this chapter and I very well felt the disillusionment of the characters and I can't help but wonder how they're going to continue their relationship when they were separated so early in the thirty kisses. xD

Can't wait for the next chapter and always eager for more of your writing,
DHA

It was quite evanescent of a chapter but I have to admit that the ending of it very much caught my attention. And drove a knife in my heart at the same time because the phrasing is also something very important as I can see you've grasped and you've done a wonderful job at phrasing this last sentence to make it have a lot of impact on readers.

Aw... Poor Maika and Itsuki... >.

I am such a lazy bum, reviewing this late. (sigh) Well, people have said, "better late than never", right? ^^

Anyway, that was a really lovely chapter. I like how you picture those two's relationship. I never really gave much thought what they would've been like together (because I quite like Maika with Kazuhito and Itsuki with ... Ryoka, was it?) but you're doing a really fine job with picturing them. I love the characters you build for them--it sounds just like them to be so cute in one another's presence and so overflowing with love. How nice. ^^

Anyway, I can't wait to see what else you have in store for this fic and how their relationship will develop or regress, respectively. ^^

Oh, that is just so lovely... I adored it! I can't believe that a person who can write so well also loves Shinshi Doumei Cross, one of my all-time favourites of Tanemura-sama (hell, what am I saying? I love ALL her works with an unrivaled passion)! What a happy, happy day for me to find your profile!

As for this piece, I quite love it, how you structured it and kept it in a nice little frame, starting with the "At twenty; at thirty, at forty" and finishing with the same motive.

The bottom line is most striking, actually. Gotta love it with all my might.

And now that you've pointed it out, it must have been ** poor Itsuki that he was Gold and she was just a bronze because the Platinum title came in with Kazuhito's obsession with her... hmm... Intriguing.

I can't wait to see what else you have planned for this story. I'm very intrigued where you're going to go with these thirty kisses. ^_^