Cute story. There were parts that I thought was funny, like the championship scene. XD Her dad was there? How the heck was that even possible? It was sad because they couldn't be together, but cute nonetheless. Good job.

This chapter also seemed like a good starter. Good job! :D

I just have a few things to correct you on, if you don't mind. First, it's not Sho taicho; it's soutaichou or sotaicho (depending on how you write your stuff; I write with the first one). Second, its zanpakutou or zanpakuto; not zampakutou.

That about all I found that was wrong. Again, good job!

Interesting beginning. I haven't read a story where it was during this certain part of the ark just yet. I'll be enjoying this story, I know it! :D By the way, loved the ending where everyone tried to look away. Haha.

so sweet, i loved it! great job!

aww that's so sweet, and i like how you left the ending open

plus the bit at the end [Epilogue] was kinda cute too

good job

Bitter sweet ending.
But perfect.
Sigh, I hope they'll meet again one day.

huh? what kind of ending was that? you ned to give us a little more, is there at least a sequal?

hey!


your story is great!I like it!so much!

I really like hitsukarin fan fic!I'll wait again for the next

chapter ok!i enjoy it!!full of interesting ideas!ok see you

again!take care and more powers!^_^

Yours truly,
Rin-hime132

A most unusual ending, to a most sustained story. I cannot help but feel it somewhat lacking, since it does not touch on a revistiation of Karin and Toshiro's relationship, but rather focuses on the memories he acquired from it. Perhaps that is what you were seeking in delivery. The story does focus more on Toshiro than Karin, as one may say.

i think Karin's OOC here,.,. she wouldnt be selfish enough to just think about soccer instead of other people's safety,.,. :(

hmm,,..
i've got to say everyone's REALLY,.,. i mean,.,. WAY! OOC in here,.,. :(

hahaha
Isshin is so funny! ;)
gossiper,.,. he'll definitely get along well with Ran-chan! ;D
hehehe
trying hard matchmaker too! :D

*thumbsup to Hyou-chan*
*dancing around with Hyou-chan*
hehehe
Hyourinmaru is good! :D
hahahaha
you cant fool your zanpakutou Shiro-chan! ;)

wasnt she supposed to already know about that?
i mean,.,. Karin can see the hollows right?
i bet she saw them eating souls before already,.,.
but anyways,.,. hehehe it's your fic and i'm enjoying it so you can ignore that comment! ;)

hehehe
when Shiro-chan's head spaces off into who knows where,.,. it's really amusing,.,. :D