I love this story and can't wait for the next update. If you need inspriation I went as the Millenium Earl and a friend went as Lord Saddler. We also had an Allen, Lavi, and Lenalee so if you want pictures more then willing to send them your way. Yeah for crossovers!

I have to say, while I was reading this I thought that it sounds very much like a game. Like how when Allen fights that huge giant parasite thingy and gets a piece of gold from it..., very game like. Anyway, great work with the story, I'm really into it. I hope you update soon.

I cant find any constructive criticism...
Anyways, dont make Lenalee a Ganado...
And your style of writing fits the story. ::ThumbsUp::

Believe it or not, Allen and Lavi were actually were much in character, they both have this side that comes out when they're in the face of things like this, especally Allen saying he'd like to kill whoever infested people with paracites.

Dont worry, i have no joy in those stupid KanAre fanfics either, it makes them seem... wierd, and stops the story's flow when you read the actually manga again >.>

This was a very good chapter you made, and I understand the browser problems.

As for making Allen and Lavi seem out of character, some circumstances change people in different ways. (and the KandaxAllen pairing, it's called, crack pairing btw, not for it, not against it in my opinion)

all in all, you did very well, and personally, if I was you, I'd probably have made Allen and Lavi go insane and NOT use the designated weapons, and go with the innocence.

Ja ne!
The Autumn Alchemist

Interesting fic. I await your next chapter.(I also pray that Lenalee is alive) xD

i can tell someone had fun making the weapons up ^^
i cant wait to see what happens

Oh man that was sick... but interesting, can't wait for the next chapter! ps: i like how u did Lavi's gentleman style. looks like he fell for her!

D: i'm so glad i've only WATCHED people play this game,i don't think my stomach could handle playing the whole thing.but,you do write it well,all things considered.the mental images are gonna follow me all day...oh,and Lavi's speech pattern.i've never tried it,but i can imagine how hard it is,since i've had the displeasure of attempting a couple other characters like him.

I thought it was great! Keep up the good work and please put next chapter soon.