LOVED IT!! ^_^

awwss.. that was cute.. they should have a real song with those words.. AWESOMENESS!

~Dreaming101

omg that was great good job i give a wawway thumbs up!

Ahem. o...k. Uh... why am i doing this again? Oh yeah. nice story!!

This is the second time I've read this... I don't remember the last time, but after rereading it, it seemed clearer somehow and I understood it better. It's a really good read. :)

Very mature for Tenten. I especially loved the mood in this story.

Of course, I love it when Tenten is portrayed as an innocent, independent, and strong-willed young woman. However, I do welcome this new light that you portrayed her in this story.

Nice story! Belated happy new year!

cool story! it made me smile, even if it was just a small one. keep it up x)

Cool~! The story seems really nice =D Great job :D

Awesome, and interesting. It's been a long time since I've read something like this.

I love it. very good. The metepoers healped the story glide allong, but a bit of it seemed forced.

Wow, very well written. I could picture everything clearly, like a storybook. Well done, well done :)

-Kat

Beautiful.

Simply Amazing

I loved the instuments you gave them,
and is the song you're talking about real??

If not, I'm going to find one that matches!

this really is beautiful. It has a little of everything and I really like it. But, part of me feels it's unfinished, or abrupt. Well, whether you add anything to it or not, this is definitely one of my favorites

u should keep writing, i liked it a lot!
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i think u have a real talent.
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