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Reviews For: Broken Souls

CampionSayn 2008-01-27 ch 4,	abuseSa! Oh, Dib... Still unable to learn from past mistakes of following people. Tsk. Anyway, great chapter, I look forward to future developements.
Ebyrith 2008-01-25 ch 4,	abuseNice, can't wait for the next chappy!
Exdeamon 2008-01-23 ch 4,	abuseHang on, did I not reveiw chapter three? Silly of me. Well, both updates have been great. I feel theres not much I can say. Your grammar is spot on, but your spelling's a little off. ro instance, its "Reveal" not "revile", assuming you wanted the room to be shown to the workers eyes, rather than to be reeking of vile, disgusting objects that'd cause any sane man to puke his brain out. Then again, these spelling mistakes seem more the fault of a small typo being incorrectly autocorrected by Word or somin', cus what you've misspelt is spelt correctly, just the wrong word... Still, the story's going well. Things are developing and its still interesting. The only thing that irked me about the descriptions, however, was the fact you used the word "car" about three times in the last sentance. That sorta detacts from the sotry, it makes things seem a little repetative. If you can, use a description or another word for an object, once you've used its name or common noun. Anyway, even if you don't correct this stuff, its minour, and your writing's still better than the vast majourity of everyone on the site. update soon, please.
invader angel of darkness 2008-01-23 ch 4, anon.	abusei really like it good begining you sould complete it and that whole vist zim hing and cat was intresting i look foward for the following capters doom all humanity!
Invader Insane 2007-12-30 ch 3,	abusedude, I wasn't original, then. ;.; wahh... Anyway, I like where this is going, but I think that you should read over your work before posting it. That helps me a lot. You don't have to, though. Going in a good direction..., err... Good points- Unique characters, growth and change in demeanor but not so much as the character is OOC or unrecognizable, and well based humor? xD
CampionSayn 2007-12-29 ch 3,	abuseSa! Joy, you have up-dated! This chapter had a few spelling mistakes but I really liked it. I'm also curious to see Aqua's purpose.
Rambonata -Tallest's Red's ... 2007-12-28 ch 3,	abuseOhnoz! I'm hooked! starts flopping like a fish out of water
GaaraxSakura Lover 2007-12-20 ch 2,	abusegreat job i can't wait to find out what's gonna happen to gaz zim mik the tallest and all the rest of the people keep going with the great stories
Exdeamon 2007-12-17 ch 2,	abuseThis is interesting. Good plot flowing here. Overall this story's very good, its got everything a story needs. the characters are spot on, the plot is revealed at a good rate, and everything fits into place at the intended time. But. I can't help but notice that every here and there theres a grammer mistake, a missing commer, a mispelt word. It really detracts at some points. Some consistencies in these mistakes are really confusing. for example, You keep deskriping Mik as a small "creator" Now, usually, that means "one who creates things", so I'm assuming you mean "creature" as in "living thing". Honestly, all you need to do is double check things as you write, and if words look bad or off spell check it, or ask someone. do that, and this will be brilliant, nigh perfect.
CampionSayn 2007-12-05 ch 2,	abuseSa! I really enjoyed this chapter! However, I have a question, Is Mik some kind of SIR unit like Gir or is he an alien alien?
geminidragon76 2007-12-03 ch 2,	abuseIt's gasp Zim! Yay! Yet so many questions... keep it up! and great pace too! ^.^!
CampionSayn 2007-11-28 ch 1,	abuseSa! this was a lovely first chapter, definitely worth reading. I hope to read more of this, so up-date soon!
spirit 2007-11-28 ch 1, anon.	abusereally like how ya started this! update soon!
jhonny999 2007-11-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseits really good but you better finish it kay?
Catnip93 2007-11-27 ch 1,	abuseYou wrote a good beginning!! Sounds very interesting, can't wait for more chapters :]

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