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| Haru Inuzuka 2008-08-06 ch 1,  | abuse-sniff- That was SO SAD! ...yet so very sweet. Ja! =^^= |
| xXKillorbeKilledXx 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abuseI...really enjoyed this one-shot, it was really new to me, just how it would repeat itself and would forever happen...it was quite different, keep up the good work! |
| Santillo 2007-11-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseAno!What was that?I'm confuzzled,confused,and unamused.Please explain that for me.I didn't understand a thing that was going on. |
| Evil RULZ 2007-11-28 ch 1, | abusethat was really sad :( i was crying |
| Kagome Lady of Darkness 2007-11-28 ch 1, | abuseGreat work! I was good! |
| Elvira Duchess Of The Night 2007-11-28 ch 1, | abusethis is so sad yet i love it such a sad romantic story were there is no real happy ending if you think about it its a work of art |
| dragonmage06 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseWell, I'm a little confused. First, I guess I don't understand why Kagome jumped off the bridge. Was she already dead and just LOOKED like she jumped off the bridge to her death? If she was dead, how did Tamaki kiss her hand? And how did she smack him? And I don't think Kagome would curse like Cid, so maybe that line (as much as I love it) doesn't fit. Also, I would cut down a little bit on the japanese. There were a few times that I didn't understand the words used. I mostly didn't understand the more obscure ones like "Tono" and "Nandaiyoh" Your story would appeal to a wider audience if you also took out some of the ones like "matte" (which is also a color in English) and "onii-san" for people who don't even know basic Japanese. I hope you found this helpful! |
| IchikoKitsuneKoumori 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseIt seem like time was turned back..? |
| CrOsSoVerz 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abusenice plot XD hope you continue writing ^O^ |
| Ayjah 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseVery different! Certainly not what I expected! But wow held me to the end :) |
| Kage Otome 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseExcellent one-shot I enjoyed it. So Hikaru is remembering...? I liked it. |