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| Count X. Gamlxltoe Nightmar... 2008-04-09 ch 4,  | abuseGood Chap buddy. It has been awhile but it was good. |
| Mentality at its Worst 2008-03-14 ch 3, | abuseAww, you remind me a lot of Michael, you know. You seem to really like to write fight scenes--and you do it so well. I really liked how descriptive Hydra and Sabata's battle was, Matt :) I think you're doing very well putting your thoughts into words--can't wait to read about Hydra's 'true form'~ |
| Bio Hazard 2008-02-29 ch 3, anon. | abuseThis chapter is SO COOL! Great job Matt you keep updating, I like the battle with Sabata Hydra. Great work! Leon |
| Count X. Gamlxltoe Nightmar... 2008-01-15 ch 2, | abuseI DON'T WANT TO HEAR YOU! Beside telling us of this story. good job X. |
| Mentality at its Worst 2008-01-08 ch 2, | abuseVery well written again, Matt. Your tenses are much better, you're improving! And you've got lots of detail you're working with, describing what people and objects look like. I hope to find out soon what happens to the young child at the end of the chapter. Keep writing, and I'll be ready to read it when you post it! |
| BioHazard 4 2008-01-06 ch 2, | abuseSweet chapter Matt, good work I can't wait for chapter 3. Leon |
| BioHazard 4 2008-01-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good fic, though you might want to detale it better, but that it realy, I can't wait for the next chapter! |
| Count X. Gamlxltoe Nightmar... 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abusePretty good first story Matt. I hope for you the best. |
| Mentality at its Worst 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseThat's not a bad start at all, Matt! I have never played Boktai before, but these are your own characters you have created for this story? It's very good for you to begin writing the way you are; you will receive much useful feedback--I wouldn't necessarily say that "no one likes blunt advice" - sometimes...it's better to let it out like that, and you should be prepared for it someday, right? :) Anyway, I quite liked when Django joined in and said "crud" along with Hydra and Sabata; it really was funny. How about for your next chapter you focus on tenses--do you know what I am talking about? Past/present tenses. An example would be: "Hydra quickly slices one in half then stabbed the one on him" Instead of slicES (present tense), how about slicED? It would flow a bit better with the rest of the sentence because then you have 'stabbED' afterward, which is also in past-tense. They can be tricky sometimes, but if you keep watching for them, you'll pick up on them no problem. Keep writing, and always try to do better with every chapter you write. |