aww feel a bit sorry for Beryl she was genuinely competing for Dariens affections but she should have gone aobut it a different way. oh well, loved the whole story and the ending, great job.

finally! someone who doesnt portray beryl as a complete B*,thankyou for that. its nice to see that someone realised villains are usually that way for a reason, beryl might have actually been nice before she met metallia, who knows. anyway loved the story so far so onto the next chapter :)

AW POOR MAMURO...

Great!! 10/10 stars!

love it, love it. Although I thought maybe you'd have a scene like the video one with the old ppl except they somewhat get along or something, make up- who knows? lol. But loved it all the same =D

AW! SO CUTE! I loved this part:
“That is a long time,” Beryl answered hollowly, intrigued in spite of herself, “You have remarkable endurance.”
lol, such a weird comment, but I love the banter in this-- awesome dialogue.

aw.. Dude this is such a good storyline like I've said b4. It is very surprising & original

Very funny =)

weird dreams, but very good plot once again.

"Artemis has the m-m-money!"

"Then I'll - uh -oh." He remembered belatedly that he was now as poor as she was.

"Sorry, I don't have any money either."


lol, loved that part. You are very witty, although I don't want him with Beryl. I hate Beryl (bias from the manga & cartoon but still). I like your plot, it is well thought out!

This is gonna be good. It is really funny so far.

Beautifully written! :D Your expressions and word choice are unique and varied and oh so excellent lol.

Great twist on the characters and the story. Keep up the great writing! :D

Ah I love AU fics and this is the first SM AU that seems really awesomely different. :D GREAT WORK!

These parts, in particular, really had me giggling:

>“I work!” she retorted and actually stuck her tongue out at him.

“You have to be too old to do that,” he remarked calmly, “and what kind of work is this?”

He picked up a random, fudge stained manga volume and tossed it toward her. She ducked but somehow fell off her chair.>“Odango-atama,” he repeated, trying it out, “I like that, it's perfect for you.”

“You...jerk!”

“You're not very creative are you?” he grinned, “But what can one expect from an Odango?”

is there going to be a sequel? is the mystery girl that Adamus is dating Beryl?

Aww I loved it! I just wish you would continue this!