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| luigi-green-wonder 2008-04-19 ch 2,  | abuseThis story is really interesting, but you should really proofread before you post. Grammatical errors make this hard to read at times, but since I like the plot so far, I'll keep reading. |
| DonPianta 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseI like this story. I wonder if Luiig is a magic person who gets visons of the past... Your story is a some grammar errors, but not too many. Just capitalizatipon and punctuation. Otehrwise, I really like your story! |
| C War 2008-01-07 ch 2, | abuseNice! I really like this. It could use some fine-tuning, though. Like a run through Word's spellcheck/grammarcheck. But still, I really enjoyed reading this. |
| C War 2007-12-12 ch 1, | abuseYay! I love the idea of Luigi as the headliner! Go Go Go! As for style, good work. I like how you wrote it. |
| Twanny Bizzle 2007-12-07 ch 1, | abuseHey I remember you, you told me that you liked my stories...But never left a review, [sigh] whatever. Here's a review from me to...Eh, you. Meh, it's pretty cool, bro, but you have to remember to captialize...You forgot to do that A LOT! Alright update, ok. Dammit, Dammit, DAMMIT...Bizzle be dazzled |
| PrincessPeachandDaisy 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abuseI think it's good, not a bad start to tell you the truth. It's that, you need to capitalize in some places. But over all, you're doing good so far. But don't give up! |
| Luigenius 2007-11-29 ch 1, | abuseNot a bad start. Could be improved in some places. One thing to remember is always capitalize the begining of a quote. Other than that, its pretty good so far. You might also want to seperate some sections beetween the time of 1,0 years ago to know with something like a line. Other than those two things, I'm liking this so far. Please update. |