Aww, this one is so good! Although I must read twice to understand the last paragraph.. but it's cool.

I like the pairing of Hiruma x Mamori, its so awesome!

lol inner hiruma *crushed* hahahahah

Awesome! They're in character and it is a cute story, very believable.

Ciao!

Geez, that was awesome. I really liked the pace of the story. HirumaxMamori can go on forever. ^_^ Thanks!

i love it. it captures a perfect point of view from a teenage girl's mind. :)

wait... is this a one-shot?! can you make it a little bit longer? pretty please please...

Very subtle and nice. You capture Mamori well.

Nice…Hope to read more from you =)

Note: Go SENA! Go Komusubi-san! Go Kurita-san! GO DEVIL BATS! Do your best for Hiruma-kun and Christmas Bowl! YAHA!

I love it. Very nice, and you had Mamori completely in character. I especially love the end =D

this was great! i loved it so much! really nice job. a second chapter or sequel would not be frowned upon!

Your story is so well-written and realistic =)