This is a lovely story. Aside from the fact that I adore this pairing, you've written it in such a graceful way. The only complaint I have is that the frequency and manner of the breaks made it feel a bit too fragmented, and I think it should have been smoother. But then again, maybe that's the way you intended it. Either way, great job!

Wow. This is just so beautiful. Really, really beautiful. Very well written. Looking forward to more of your stuff.

That was so sad...beautiful, but sad. Awe...

Amazing! Your writting style is so beautiful and so is this story! I mean wow! I can't believe how fantastic this story is! Ack! It's going directly to my favs list! Please write more soon! You are awesome!^-^
RequiemElise

wow. That was beautiful.

Wow, what an amazing and powerful story. I loved the way they got over their issues with each other and how they slowly get to know one another. The most powerful part and feeling was the melancholy-ness with Neji and how he didn't really understand that Hinata loved him. I'm not very eloquent this morning but really, extremely well done and I love your story!

Hohoho...you've taken to Naruto now, I see...

Beautifully heartbreaking. I am so speechless.

OH MY GWAD! OMG OMG OMG

Yyou...YOU!! pRO.

You-u-u mak-e- me-- spee-c-hless--s-s









hAHA. It's astounding. I like it. Slowly with each passage, you draw it closer, darker, nearer to it.

When Neji starts to accept her, we smile.
When Neji wants to console her, we beckon.

And you twist. Teasing us with your words and
finally. When we're breathless, Hintata kisses.

It's a complex storyline for a oneshot, and people might even say it typical, but what i loved was how you wrote it. Beautifully.

PRO PRO PRO PRO PRO.

Write another Hinata fic...PLEASE? >

*sigh* Oh dear, that was really beautiful. You are really good with descriptions, and Hinata's characterization (the Hyuuga ice in her) is intriguing. But the story is so sad. T_T